A Scattered Dream

My previous generations,
Wasted all the treasure of
those words,
So whenever I need to revile,
my words mute,
The raze if I wish to swallow,
Trillions of canes of drinks,
But in legacy I got only,
A few peg's of sanity,
Growing my insanity day by day,
When eyes watching the cloth of
the shirt you wear to weigh the class,
And it was taught,
Twenty four hours a day,
Success is only in counting coins,
And all dreams are,
Just to achieve,
But there was a scattered dream,
Between the earth and the sun,
Who wished only to loose,
Which I go on washing, to fade,
And still it come back,
Like a pole star on same spot,
Where every night I took some shelters,
Hiding the fact, even from myself,
That this dream is actually, I am, myself.

Reviews

[Ian Gilmour]

Dreams start and end with us. I think a lot of time, at least in American underdog hero culture, we believe that dreams are bigger than us and that we chase them but I believe the opposite. We grant them existence and therefore the power they hold over us is an illusion. We birth them, they are ours. Your poem seems to suggest this but it does so with subtle grace that works very well. Well done.

[hardeep sabharwal]

thanks a lot lan Gilmour :)

[stars are far]

That was amazing work keep it up :)

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much

[bunny]

Dude its amazing and your writing says it

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot bunny

[Dipanjan Dutta]

Excellent Hardeep. The last line says it all. I am short of words mate. Keep Going, cheers

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou dear friend

[ayesha gupta]

it was great. i enjoyed reading it

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot :)

[Prabha Salimath]

Wow no more words Hardeep. yes because " That this dream is actually, I am,
myself."

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thanks a lot Prabha

[MomzillaNC]

Interesting lines with good imagery

NOTES: I recommend you take another pass for grammar and spelling

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[Ryan Henderson]

Very nice poem, flowed nicely and holds a deep meaning. Indeed a fitting title. I can honestly say that poetry is not really my thing, but this poem was not bad as far as poems go! Keep writing!

[hardeep sabharwal]

Thankyou so much