Mother, Mother

Mother, Mother,

why do you act like you don't want me?

You have acted this way

since the day

you claim my father forced himself

upon you.

 

Mother, Mother,

why do you favor you're other children more?

You have acted this way

since the day

you had other daughters

with fairer hair.

 

Mother, Mother,

why don't you like me?

You have acted this way

since the day

I made your life a living hell.

 

Aren't you suppose to forgive?

Author's Note

Opinions?

Reviews

[smalltownsympathies]

Wow. I enjoyed this. I can feel the bitter perceptions from the first stanzas, and the pain that she's obviously caused to you. I personally can relate. However, I feel as though you're a talented writer, but you go for the obvious words, phrases, and such. For example, "mother mother, why don't you like me? You have acted this way since the day I made your life a living hell"
I enjoyed this stanza, but I feel as though you could make it more abstract, if you really wanted to. Push yourself for your best work!

:)

[Gustan Joseph]

Yes, most mothers do forgive there children after some point in time. Yeah, great poem. I really like the order, you know the what it was put together and all. I like your work.

[VioletRose]

I completely feel the exact same way! It is sad to know that someone has the same problem, and that their not sure what to do about it! NICE

[r]

reallllllllly painful writing..... i don not know this feeling but i have to guess it really sucks... im sorry this has to happen to you

[Chloe Christine]

Amazing, Really Really strong peice, good job! 95/100(:

[victoria]

this poem is so strong, but shows so much weakness. it brought tears to my eyes, to think about all the kids that feel this way or have neglectful mothers is just heartbreaking, you did an amazing job portraying it. great write :)

[Brokensoul]

Does your mother not love you? I guess she does dearie...mothers are never cruel. But I liked the way you expressed!

[maryjaneuy]

love this one. ;)

[MusicJunkie66]

I loved it! very mature and powerful.

[Casper Cross]

Tells a very interesting tale in a only a very short amount of words. Nice Job.