Two Trees In The Fall

 "No more.

I can't live in your shade."

 

"What? What do you mean?"

 

"I can't see myself anymore under your branches.

There isn't any light."

 

"You mean after all the fruit I've provided for you?

The leaves I've shed for you

You're just going to untangle your roots?"

 

"I need to replant, find new grounds.

I can't be your faithful sapling anymore."

 

"When the Wind knocked you over, I extended my branches to catch you,

You fell into my canopy, where I nurtured you. This soil is rich and wholesome--"

 

"But you save all the nutrients for yourself.

Don't make this about you,

I just want to see the Sun."

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

This is beautiful. I love the last line. It is so simple, but yet so interesting. Thank you very much for sharing this poem with us.

[raining]

Good, coming at things from a different angle. The idea of two trees helps the theme come across well. "Don't make this about you, I just want to see the sun".... kind of like that ending. A straight forward good poem thanks raining.

[Sound]

I like it. When I realized the poem was two trees talking to eachother I gotta tell you, I almost clicked to another page. But I must say this read sort of pulls you in. I really like it and I'm happy I took the time to read it.

[dining alone]

Escape from parental suppression in a way? I really like it, especially the whole personification of these trees. :)