the world lost a awesome man

today is black the sky is gray
it hurts right now but it will be okay

the world lost a man that was a soldier of him and the world
he fought threw all to stay alive and god called him home

he's looking at me now wondering why I am writing this but it makes sense
he touched everyone in his own special way today his body took over his mind and heart

so now I'm writing in rememerince of him and tring not to weep myself to sleep

Reviews

[Alessander]

I HATE pointing out typos in such pieces, but I must. It's "sense" not "sence" and "memrince" I don't think is a word. "In Memorium" (which I'm pretty sure I mispelled) would be much more appropriate - I would strongly recommend Tennyson's "In Memorium" - a long, emotive mourning of a beloved.

"Better to have loved and lost
Than not have loved at all"

Sorry for your loss.

[Prateeksha Khot]

that was indeed touching n beautiful

[jex]

as I've mentioned before, I love your writing. This one is very heart breaking and I can feel the pain you have when I read this. It's very beautiful Sarah and you should know that he'll appreciate this.

[Undying Glory]

this is heart-rending stuff, we're all really sorry for your tremendous loss...

[...]

... ah ... that's heart-breaking ... you must miss him so ... i cannot begin to imagine how his loss must hurt ... i have lost loved ones ... and stayed awake in disbelief and sorrow ... and written about them ... you've written something beautiful to honour him with ... and it'll always remain memorable and special ... take care ...

[St.Jimmy]

its kinda weird and sad feeling when you lost a kin.
its weird because when a person who was with you yesterday is not with you today
and its sad because you've lost a person whom you loved
But I want to remind you again the rule of this nature that everything that has existed on this earth will be destroyed one day or the another. It is compulsory.
Therefore for what is compulsory you are not supposed to be sad
~Aaradhya

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I thought it was sad, but I hate war. Wars are horrible and they need to be over. Thank for sharing. :)
P.S. The poems nice though.

[Hippy]

he fought threw all to stay alive and god called him home
in this line threw should be through and its sad a life must pass but its part of the cycle it has to happen he is in a better place to bad these bodys cant support a good soul for that long its a shame but he is probly happy with his life and it looks like he made an impact my this man rest in peace

[GrownUpTime]

so sorry. sad and meaningful

[angel gone bad]

that is good
that really shows that you miss this person

[Rain Kissed Secret]

How sad. That's all I can say. You did great honey. Keep it up