Crawling to the Other Page

I thought this poem out in my head one day when I was walking home.

lets jump start the day babe;
i wanna see the world.
stretch out your arms
and be like a star
reaching for the Earth.

jump on the bright side babe;
its the elevator home.
close your eyes sweetie;
make believe I'm you're bright side
shining through.

lets crawl to the other page babe;
set sail to a moon.
we can see the blue shine
right at our feet;
just listen to the holes cry.
 
i want to see your flaws;
please show me your art.
i want to radiate colours
that don't exist;
to be the white light.

you loosened your grip babe;
my hand feels misplaced.
don't you want to hold my hand dear?
i'll just put it back in place.

spread out our fingers babe;
i'll watch you count the time.
lets wait for you to break
every heartstring that's mine;
come on, over drive my heart.

i still love you babe;
i felt that you were mine.
i wanna see the world still;
all the colours in the sky.
i'll set sail to the moon soon;
to be with the holes that cry.

Reviews

[J. James Reider]

This is so touching, with very brilliant imagery... it was almost like I was in your head, living your emotions and thoughts... I also like the subtle rhyming... I think if this piece were too rhymy it would ruin the feel of it... this poem also flows really well, I only got tripped up at "that don't exist;"... maybe would be better written as "that do not exist;"? solid, well rounded piece of work... good job!

[Dulce de Leche]

There are so many great lines in this. I can't quote them all.

Love it.

[Kelley Pascoe]

I loved this and how you used words different than most would of.
Great write!!!! Thanks for sharing.
Kelley Frost