Wild Heart

Anger and aggression everyone saw,

no one knew the real me,

getting my heart ripped with a tiger's claw,

no more fresh air to breathe.

I've become succumb,

I've become numb.

There's nothing worth a fight,

There's nothing to think at night.

no more friends alike,

please come to this world of mine,

There's a lot, and things are just more than fine.

I'm in a world of angels finding fake,

I tell them I'm from a world where fake is what they make.

I asked them how did I enter this world?

They told me, when you hung yourself onto the fan and people cursed.

Reviews

[I Am Svetlana]

I really enjoyed this, especially the powerful ended you wrote. I understand the feelings of having a wild heart that not many can tame. It's hard to go on when you feel no one will ever understand you...but you need to find ways to release your heart little by little, give the world a delicate taste of what you have to offer. Every writer has a wild heart that is caged...we are afraid to be judged or rejected, but we just have to keep our pens moving & keep setting paper on fire. This is how we will live free...

[iamshadowine]

Thank you ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

The title was trickery. The poem is direct and honest. Life teaches us the wrong things. I wanted to read and know more. Left me with a wide open ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[iamshadowine]

thank you!! :D

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[blackbelief]

"I asked them how did I enter this world?
They told me, when you hung yourself onto the fan and people cursed." What an ending! Strong imagery and depiction of thoughts. "fake is what they make" made me a fanboy. :D

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Sydney]

I think the best poems are the ones you have to read more than once to truly understand. When I first read this poem I was confused by the ending, but after another read I definitely grasped more of the meaning (I think anyways). I find this piece very haunting and tragic but love it. Good job!

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much :D

[Sanhorsey]

I like the way it rhymes. Nice raw piece of work indeed, though I think at times it gets a little tricky to understand. Still it leaves a mark, and that is good. Keep up the great work!

[iamshadowine]

thank you :D

[Julian Lorenzana]

I find your poems easy to read but not necessarily easy to understand the point being made. Even so, I enjoyed your poems and the last one, Wild Heart, hit me in the heart. Hanging herself, or himself, showed me that she/he was, indeed, as wild as the rest of the world where fake is the norm. Of course, she was hurting so badly with a torn heart that her/his only way out was suicide.

[iamshadowine]

thank you for reading it

[T.Y.N.P.]

ouch! this is a pretty raw piece and so lovely! Nice job!

[iamshadowine]

thank you! :D

[Johnny]

how gripping! action from the first line on! great piece indeed! more please! 100pts

[iamshadowine]

thank you so much!!

[Insight "MH"]

Well expressed, the rage is roaring in each line. Good job my dear friend.

[iamshadowine]

thank you!!

[Insight "MH"]

You are welcome.

[FaeryQueen]

"I've become succumb," I think you meant "I've succumbed"

Maybe towards the end you wouldn't want to rhyme in the same line, it seems to work in your case well... I commend you.