The Tides Of Friendship

 

 

With true friendship

 

Just as the tides

 

 It is always there

 

A constant ebbing 

 

licking and touching at the heart   

 

In times of strife and violent moments 

 

friendship rises to the occasion

 

And in calmness

 

 Friendship soothes

 

With it's continuous lapping presence.

 

Just as the wind coincides with the tides of the ocean

 

So friendship coincides with the happenings of life.   

Reviews

[Christine]

Wow what an amazing poem.
I love the ebb and flow of the words that you use.
Great write!!!
I hope you get well soon.
You and your family are in my prayers.
Feel better.
Christine :-)

[Emily Rose]

Ah, quite the metaphor! The color of the text and its slanting font reinforces the tides/ocean idea - good choice! I do have one minor grammatical error to point out, however: the "it's" in the tenth line should be the possesive its, not the contraction. As it stands now your line reads: "With it is continuous lapping presence," which I don't think is what you meant! Also, I would consider putting in a bit more punctuation than just the two periods in the last few lines, or nixing both of the periods completely. It's generally considered bad form in poetry to use just a few punctuation marks instead of using "formal" punctuation, or none at all, unless there's a very good poetic reason for it.

[Becca]

Very beautiful and your words express so well what I am discovering here at the cafe.
Powerfully moving.

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wonderful imagery to describe friendship.

[Lalli]

those last 2 lines really bring this poem together. It finishes strong. You touched on the concept of friendship in a very creative manner. kudos!

much love n' respect

-Lalli

[Arthur Henn]

Reading this I imagine a beautiful soul of a woman
Walking the shoreline of your choice
Under a full moonlit sky, dressed in white cotton
The sea breeze flowing upon her sensuality
Causing her dress to dance along with her womanhood
While she is by herself longing for the one she misses
And loves.

Great Poem

[THERISA]

Your usage of waves as a simile to friendship, is masterful done. Felt like i was stand on a beach as the waves came in from the Pacific Ocean at English Bay, BC. Smooth flowing rhythm scheme reinforces this feeling to the reader. Thank you for sharing this calming poem with us.

Therisa

[SweetPeachesAlways]

You have this remarkable flair for capturing and translating emotions and for painting such a vision within my mind....ahhh, man, beautiful! Great job!

[Chad Wesley Allbrett]

Yeah, I concur. Your imagery makes me think of a clear,
soft lake on a summer's day, with someone you love.

[Eagle Cruagh]

You might have mentioned that
it would take an ocean to contain our
feelings, friendship between us runs that deep.
The tides are but drops in the sand compared to
the enormity of my feelings for you.
This was a first class poem, it sings.
Thank you,
----- EAGLE CRUAGH