Shadows hung

The world is darkest when you find it impossible to forgive yourself

Shadows hung

by jack

 

 

Desperate on this darkest star

In stagnant air to breathe

Jagged reach of tended far

So much I can’t believe

 

A’ chained upon the barricade

Locked this welded form

Broken of mistakes I’ve made

Waiting on the storm

 

As here upon my knees I weep

Head within my hands

Crying tears forever keep

Aside from promised plans

 

My heart now sliced in silent view

The end beckons me home

This which I have done to you

My life it sits alone

 

Shadows hung on shouldered fall

Mud encrusts my feet

Pain besets this lonely call

As endless sorrows seep

 

“I’m sorry”, echoes in my head

Engulfed in rhythm’d flow

Offered of a broken man

Who prays for you to know

 

Pleadings from this sectioned seat

I beg with all I am

Calling out in sad repeat

This empty place I stand

 

I ask for your forgiveness

Myself I can’t forgive

This punishment lies endless

Of fractured days I live

 

The pain is ever coming

Though nothing I shall share

I face the sun so stunning

In hopes that you are there

 

But still the time is passing

Sand in glass does fall

Desolate amassing

And I deserve it all

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"I ask for your forgiveness
Myself I can’t forgive
This punishment lies endless
Of fractured days I live

The pain is ever coming
Though nothing I shall share
I face the sun so stunning
In hopes that you are there

But still the time is passing
Sand in glass does fall"
Asking for forgiveness is noble and forgiving the self is honorable if it is done right...Well penned as always...:)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Sami. I appreciate you

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Mark]

Wow, first time I've seen darkness in your writing. well crafted, and packed with emotion Jack. The remorse seems so big it threatens to eat him whole.

[Jack...]

Thanks Mark, glad you could feel the emotions I was trying to convery

[Pryde Foltz]

A lovely apology. Very nice.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much

[Rita L. Sev]

This is a sorrowful read; I feel that the speaker is punishing himself, likely more than his crime warrants. We forgive everyone else's imperfections, but never our own. Poignant piece, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Rita.

[SyberRose]

People learn from their mistakes so its another learning experience in life. Nicely done Jack

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Rose.

[InsanityWriter]

"But still the time is passing
Sand in glass does fall
Desolate amassing
And I deserve it all"

So powerful... This is an amazing piece. Simply amazing. :)

100/100

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my dear friend.

[InsanityWriter]

No problem. :)

[Kristallo]

That last stanza is superb. Your gift for expressing all the shades and facets of life really is limitless. I felt the ache in this one deeply, your carefully chosen words are imbued with power and refinement. This really is elegance in the deep recesses of sorrow, and I related to it most personally. Thank you for sharing.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much. I am truly humbled by your nice comments.

[Nick.B]

You've managed to create a dark painting with your words, great job, beautiful imaginary (if dark can be called beautiful) but still love the poem

[Jack...]

Thanks Nick, I think dark can be beautiful

[Blue Ivory]

I love the language that you use. Not many can craft with such beauty using this language today.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much dear Siren. Sweet words you share make me smile.