Again Dreams Abandon Me

Why can't they ever come true?

Again Dreams Abandon Me

 

Forever in my heart

shall live the memories

of what once was

and what shall never be

again

 

Desires cast a frozen net

it seems, as I dwell

deep within this chamber

which holds my secret

dreams

 

For it is you,

constant in my head

pulling me from side to side

until my normal course I

abandon

 

Leaving a want

for more of this dream

which now expires

in a weeping fog upon

me

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading my poem

Reviews

[InsanityWriter]

Fantastical piece... I drifted away into a dreamlike world as I read this... Beautifully done. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much.

[Shivam Murari]

I like the way the end of each stanza makes the theme of the poem. Well written,as always :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much

[Baby Ricochet]

Nice. It's got a little painting and everything. Bitter sweet and wonderfully crafted. Excellent work sir.

[Jack...]

Thank you sir

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

I like the style of this one, Jack. Quite clever the "poem within a poem" idea. As always, you have crafted something beautiful and unique that speaks volumes with few words. The mournful, melancholy feel of this one is heartwrenching, and yet I feel good having read it. Nicely done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much for your kind words. They are truly appreciated as are you

[TL Boehm]

this is an introspective, lonely piece. Its beautiful but sad. "weeping fog..." that's a formidable little phrase there. Wish I'd penned it.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend

[Delaney]

It's so nostalgic, but ever so lovely. Like, acceptance of the change, but quite reluctantly. I very much enjoyed the poem, and the format of the poem. It's like a start from the beginning and a start from the end, that ends in the middle. If that makes any sense. But I find it almost unneccesary to make the words that the title comprises of bold. I understand the reasoning for it, but I find it almost, almost, takes away from the pure talent of your work. It's as if saying a clever joke, then having to explain in. It isn't funny anymore, is it? I see that stands a little true here, but it is still very brilliant. But I think it'd be better hidden from those less thoughtful of literature, almost as if a cherished inside joke between close friends. You do not wish anyone else to know, unless they understand it. Almost like having a scavenger hunt, but putting red fllags where all the goodies lie. Do not explain to those who cannot understand your genius. Chances are they won't respect it anyways. But it truly is wonderfully construction. Well done.

Yours truly, Delaney

[Jack...]

Thank so much. The jury is still out on the bold font.

[Delaney]

You're welcome. Do whatever pleases you, if you prefer it with the bold font, then stick to your guns. It's only one opinion, so there is no pressure to change unless it appeals to you.

Yours truly, Delaney

[LadySoDivine]

I like the form of the poem, very original. And it is true, we often wish for things that have little probability of coming true and our dreams consist of some of our deepest wishes. But then again, that is the curse of the human kind.
Well done, my friend! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend

[Rita L. Sev]

Cleverly formed message in a bittersweet poem. Impressive!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much

[Frieda P]

Bittersweet Jack, I love the bold lettering that makes a statement all it's own...as it's title you've come full circle with this charming write.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Frieda.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

Wowow! Jack, this is simply amazing. You did a good job here. I like the creativity in using the words in your title, as the last word in each paragraph. :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so much. Glad you enjoyed it.