Spinning

Missing a lost love

 

 

 

Spinning

 

It is midnight

 

As I find the door closed…slammed

and shadows of what once was

disappearing down the drive

into the dreary nightscape so barren…as is my heart

 

It is 1:00 am

 

The fan… it hums,

affixed its ceilinged perch, spinning,

spitting a constant flow of sorrowed air

upon my unguarded skin…sifting my soul

 

It is 2:00 am

 

My eyes are open, wet… stained,

still staring at the spinning blades,

counting the blur of rotation,

finding it difficult to focus…on anything

 

It is 3:00 am

 

My mind is another place,

far from the undisturbed side of the bed,

monogrammed with your absence,

hand-stitched in loss and sadness

 

It is 4:00 am

 

I clutch your pillow,

inhaling your scent,

feeling the folds encase me

in down…which I feel, though not as soft

 

It is 5:00 am

 

The alarm clock startles me,

as my heart re- breaks…and

my eyes form their  tortured

river of tears, falling upon my already saturated place

 

It is 6:00 am (the sun is rising)

 

 

I miss you…desperately

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading.

Reviews

[eglantine]

While this is a nice poem (I especially like the use of time to divide the poem into sections) it does not help my own broken heart lol Thanks for sharing. Not sure if the last line is needed.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much E. Sometimes when your heart is broken you can't help but say, I miss you, even if no one is listening.

[Sami Khalil]

"The alarm clock startles me,



as my heart re- breaks…and



my eyes form their tortured



river of tears, "
This write stir so many sad feelings and done with great creativity with a heartfelt soul...Unique to say the least...:)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Sami.

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...:)

[icelandicblue]

Oh, insomnia and loss never sounded so torturous. You've captured those dark hours so well. My favorite stanza was this:

My mind is another place,

far from the undisturbed side of the bed,

monogrammed with your absence,

hand-stitched in loss and sadness

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Blue. I always look forward to your comments.

[shythatway]

..and how incredibly slow time passes, when time is the only thing that will help eventually. :( TL is right about those lines.

[Jack...]

Thank you my friend.

[anamezic]

I really like this one. Reminds me of a love I lost.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.

[Kristin Lee]

Such heartache and longing in this one. I like the break from tradition with the time flashes. It made me think of times when my husband travels. That sense of reaching for his pillow just so I can feel or smell something familiar....very well done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Kristin.

[Debbie_Philly]

This is heart breaking and sooo nicely written. I felt all that you felt and I have been there... great piece !!

[Jack...]

Thank you so much Debbie

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Wow, this one is heartbreaking, Jack. Truly...this write is probably the most "real" and "honest" that I have read all day, and while it isn't all tied up in a pretty box with a bow on top, it is so starkly true and tangible that I felt it more deeply than anything else. Beautifully tragic...

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Sarah. Your comments mean so very much to me.

[redflutterby]

I feel as though you reached into my mind and pulled this very memory out. What a painful time in my life...

Thank you for sharing this heart wrenching poem.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Red. Sorry to bring up bad memories

[TL Boehm]

monogrammed with your absence,

hand-stitched in loss and sadness
This is a STELLAR line - in a wonderfully sad poem. Highly relatable. Well done.

[Jack...]

Thank you so much my friend.