A few minutes more

That's not asking for much is it?

 

A few minutes more

 

 

“A few minutes more?”

he has asked in a whisper

Promising hope

from the depths of his heart

 

Pulling the thread

so it sits ever tighter

Finding the end

as a new place to start

 

Counting the hours,

for they add up so many

Checking his watch

as the sun seems to set

 

Pulling the moon

from the arms that now hold it

Praying for rain,

as that’s all he can get

 

Kicking a stone

near the sand quickly leaking

Rhythms his mind,

will now come soon to play

 

Searching for words,

while the second hand passes

What he expects

at the end of the day

 

Life is so short,

though he brings up the answer,

“Nothing is more

than a heart lost of love”

 

Calling to all,

as if anyone listens,

“A few minutes more?”

he now shouts up above

 

 

 

Author's Note

Thank you for reading

Reviews

[InsanityWriter]

Nicely done. :) I enjoyed reading this!

[Jack...]

Than you so much my Butterfly.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Yes as time passes and we regret the loss of it and the opportunities we failed to take, we want to tease it out that bit further. Well told in poetic form Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend.

[LadySoDivine]

It feels good to come back and read another one of you excellent poems, Jack! I have this feeling - the feeling of never having enough time, quite often as well. When I read this, it reminded me of the thoughts I have when I have to soon part with my loved one and I always think to myself "Can't it be a little longer?". I love the way you rhymed and separated the stanzas. Another great one, my friend! :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my sweet friend. I always appreciate you stopping by for a visit. Spend as much time as you like. :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

a very powerful write, jack.. i love the sand metaphor for time slipping away. it's always been a favorite of mine.. in our youth, we do not worry about time because we think it is unlimited, eternal, but the further we age, we begin to see time as fleeting and we begin doing everything we've ever wanted to do, and then as death knocks on our door, we realize we are out of time and beg for just a little more.. you related this in your poem so well. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much Lori. I appreciate your kind words.

[Kenneth Compton]

Well done my friend!

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Kenneth

[Zahra]

Life is so short,
though he brings up the answer,
“Nothing is more
than a heart lost of love”

Calling to all,
as if anyone listens,
“A few minutes more?”
he now shouts up above

Wonderful poem, amazing imagery presented through the brevity of each line. Beautiful.

[Jack...]

I always appreciate your kind words. Thank you so much.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Isn't it always the way, we all need that extra time yet it never really comes, well done.

[Jack...]

Once more, thank you so very much.

[s y e]

Awwww, this was so emotional and touching. The picture gave me shivers down my spine, this was a very vivid, honest write.

Amazing.

[Jack...]

Thanks so muc my math genius friend.

[s y e]

:D Hehehe

[TL Boehm]

This one put a lump in my throat and brought back memories of my dad. I know he felt this way before he passed although I don't know if he shouted for more time...Amazing how a simple poem can bring back a ghost....
Powerful stuff, Jack.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much my friend and now that you mention it, I am sure my father somewhere along the line uttered those same words before he passed.

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The title is pretty 'catchy' and the poem is really good. I like it, I like it. :)

[Jack...]

Thank you so much.