Oh I wish I could dream

It's just a damn poem....................

 

 

Oh I wish I could dream

 

 

Oh I wish I could dream

neath a nightscape disaster

frowning entanglements

formed in these eyes

Fractured endeavors

from here till tomorrow

born of this heart

atop stagnant steam skies

 

Dripping of sense

never once fond of finding

answers in deep

as the quicksand holds on

Sinking this man

into unknown decisions

raking his soul

crossed the oncoming dawn

 

Painting a picture

in oils on canvas

clear as a bell

ringing quick to it’s toll

Clutching this throat

deterring all breathing

dropping the fear

ever hard on his soul

 

Grabbing a thread

and a rusty old needle

stitching this mouth

so to no longer speak

Draining that blood

pulled from fingertip prickings

crimson expense

slowly rendering weak

 

Watching the fall

from some higher up places

chuckling loud

at the sound of his scream

Checking a pulse

in an emptiness feeling

waving goodbye...

Oh I wish I could dream

 

 

Author's Note

My friends, this is not about relationships, or talking or love or anything at all...It's just a damn poem. Geez.....Kind of how I was feeling at the time....

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

Grabbing a thread
and a rusty old needle
stitching this mouth
so to no longer speak
Draining that blood
pulled from fingertip prickings
crimson expense
slowly rendering weak

Well whatever its about - and I get it. Sometimes we just write... but that part was flipping awesome.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Tammy. When you figure out what it is about...let me know, okay?

[Brittany Zedalis]

I can't even pick a favorite line. This is totally amazing.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much Brittany.

[Marie]

This sounds like a nightmare not a dream. Your images are always of moonbeams and rainbows and buterflies and runcorns...

[Jack...]

Well Marie, sometimes those things are replaced by the dark side. Thanks so much.

[Lyn Anderson]

Yeah, I know, the disclaimers. Not necessary to comment on the personal life unless it is clear in the poem or the note from the author that's what you want. As to form, font, word usage, rhythm etc., all good and a solid piece.

[Jack...]

Thanks so much KL.

[Angel]

Ha! See what happens when you raise people's expectations...and then you give them "just a damn poem"...
You think you can take a break, maybe, from being the "Prince of Romance", and write "just a damn poem", do you?


Well...maybe this once.
It's a pretty damn good damn poem, anyhow...damn it , boy, you got some damn talent!

Now, see what you made me go and do? I'll have to adjust my halo...
AGAIN!!

[Jack...]

Damn Angel...I swear!!!! and so do you. :) Thanks so much.

[Angel]

Well, damn it boy, you bring out the best in me, don't you?

[Jack...]

I'm not saying a damn thing... :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

Exactly Jack sometimes you just need to write and not be over analyzed .This however is excellent poetry my friend :)

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much Vidya.

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome :)

[kublakhan27]

Jack, my mind has betrayed me as of late...I can't write and I can't focus enough to give articulate reviews. Obviously this does deserve an articulate review but I can only say that I relate to every word and every line. You've certainly captured the feeling of a dreamer here, particularly one that feels like I do. Wonderful work my friend.

[Jack...]

Steve, I will never believe that you can't write, you just take thinking breaks...that is why when you do write you always blow me away.

[Emerald Seas]

What a journey, Jack! Glad to see you here as I pop in again.
This poem is rich with thoughts, details, exquisite embellishments describing each moment's thought. You have a wonderful talent to write - and clearly it crosses from light and romantic, to dark and sorrowful with expert ease. Well done, Jack!

[Jack...]

Thank you so very much my friend. I always appreciate when you stop by.

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Though I'm so used to your romantic verse, I still find this just as beautiful and thrilling. Another great effort from a wonderful poet.

[Jack...]

Thanks so very much my friend.

[Sami Khalil]

"a nightscape disaster

frowning entanglements

formed in these eyes

Fractured endeavors

from here till tomorrow

born of this heart"

[Jack...]

Thank you Sami?

[Sami Khalil]

I like those lines...:)................