Thunderstorm

beautiful natural disaster. it comes and goes....

Hot and humid air
Sticking on my bare skin
Lingering like your touch is a sin
Hot humid air

Gray clouds gather
Dark thoughts come together
My soul surrenders
To the dark clouds' pressure

Rain drops hit the ground
My heartbeats pound
Rain drops makes little sounds
Whispering into my ears

Wind blows violently
Trees sway swiftly
Rocking back and forth rapidly
Forcing way through my body

Flashes in the sky
Heaven screams and cries
Out of pleasure and pain
As I go insane

Storm passes by
Leaving the destruction behind
Storm passes by
Without saying good bye


 

Reviews

[I'llPlayTheJuliet]

This is great, I love the ending it could be metaphoric for so many situations.
great write.

[Scooter]

I really liked this. I think once or twice it sounded a little awkward to me, but for the most part, I really liked the flow of this poem. :) Good work! You portrayed emotion throughout this piece really well.

[J.S. Pua]

nice..
good rhyming..
good work..

[Jessica Mai]

A fantastic write. i liked the flow and i liked the rhyme schemes. Your use of words were perfect. Well done :)

[Livenrite]

Loved how the end wrapped up the feeling that's portrayed in this piece!
nice job!

[blob blob]

"Gray clouds gather
Dark thoughts come together
My soul surrenders
To the dark clouds' pressure"

nice--I Love storms
and this paints---
with gorgeous imagery---
the perfect storm...:-)
...I Love This...

J:)