Why Am I Here?

Why Am I Here?

A Story by janki
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Why am I here? about person who is being bullied teased....

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Why Am I Here?

I am a disgrace to this world, to this state, to this city, to this economy, to this neighborhood.

Why am I here? I feel that without me the world would just be perfect. My parents would have nothing to worry about and as for my siblings I wouldn’t be a bad example. But that is only if I wasn’t here.

Why am I here? I sit in class to only get bullied and called names. My teachers hate me for I laugh a lot. But that is not me. I laugh to cover me up, for that I am ashamed of my very self. Some talk behind my back and others curse at me in my face. Some whisper lies about me and tell my secrets to others, without any shame. For they think I am useless.

Why am I here? If I was an orphan, I feel life would be better. If I had no family  and friends life would be even better. Nothing to be worried about and nothing to get insulted by. I would live life the way God told us to and live it on my very own. I would preach the good news with others with nothing on my mind except what god is to bring.

Why am I here? Well, now I know. I am here for a reason, not to be a bad example, not to be bullied and cursed at, not to have no family or friends.

But as for me one day I will be gone. I will be in a deep sleep, not to be waken until the resurrection. Then you'll be sorry for then you will realize that I was worth it.

 

© 2014 janki


Author's Note

janki
This was a story/something I wrote from the top of my mind....what do u think?

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This was very heart wrenching and thought provoking. With only a few words, you conveyed so much pain and emotion and its surprising that its off the top of your head too! Like, wow!
I just wanted to point out one or two little things that I noticed.
The sentence "My parents would have nothing to worry about and as for my siblings I wouldn’t be a bad example..." try tossing in a few commas to give it a break and stop it from being a run-on. Try making it read something like "My parents would have nothing to worry about and, as far as my siblings are concerned, I wouldn't be a bad example..." also tweaked the wording a little to give it a better flow. :)
The sentence "My teachers hate me for I laugh a lot." again, try "My teachers hate me, for I laugh a lot." giving your sentences those tiny breaks helps it run along much smoother and plus allows your readers those little snippets of time between dialogue to process the emotions that you convey so nicely. :) sometimes its all about soaking in the essence of the story instead of rushing through it.
Beautiful story and wonderfully done with the conveying of emotions! I hope my little tips helped, and I can't wait to take a look at some more of your work! Very well done :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

janki

9 Years Ago

Thanks Mila! I'm happy that you liked it. Next time I will try to careful with my run on sentences... read more



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This was very heart wrenching and thought provoking. With only a few words, you conveyed so much pain and emotion and its surprising that its off the top of your head too! Like, wow!
I just wanted to point out one or two little things that I noticed.
The sentence "My parents would have nothing to worry about and as for my siblings I wouldn’t be a bad example..." try tossing in a few commas to give it a break and stop it from being a run-on. Try making it read something like "My parents would have nothing to worry about and, as far as my siblings are concerned, I wouldn't be a bad example..." also tweaked the wording a little to give it a better flow. :)
The sentence "My teachers hate me for I laugh a lot." again, try "My teachers hate me, for I laugh a lot." giving your sentences those tiny breaks helps it run along much smoother and plus allows your readers those little snippets of time between dialogue to process the emotions that you convey so nicely. :) sometimes its all about soaking in the essence of the story instead of rushing through it.
Beautiful story and wonderfully done with the conveying of emotions! I hope my little tips helped, and I can't wait to take a look at some more of your work! Very well done :)


Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

janki

9 Years Ago

Thanks Mila! I'm happy that you liked it. Next time I will try to careful with my run on sentences... read more

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Added on July 14, 2014
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Tags: bullying, teaseing, disgrace, name calling, useless, orphan, God, paradise, ressurection, no life, i am worth it

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janki
janki

jerseey city, NJ