communicating

responding to the feelings...

is it miscommunication or fantasies unexplained

you've got me going now

these feelings are hard to detain

just friends?  ah, yes, this much is true

but i know i got you going too

so close your eyes and listen to my voice

it's not just you - the air is moist

smile at me and ask me to stay

what should i do - the thoughts won't go away

my mind runs wild with no end in sight

are you going to return the feelings or put up a fight

i know you're curious to say the least

the attraction is growing stronger - they haven't ceased

will you allow me to kiss you and hold you close

don't worry, no one knows

let's lay together  - your body next to mine

relax your body while i trace your spine

your body starts to shake at the simple thought...

don't worry darlin', we'll never be caught

Reviews

[Cynthia Barrick (CHING..]

VERY CLEVER WRITING, ENJOYED THIS, COULD ALMOST FEEL THE TRACE DOWN MY SPINE KEEP UP THE GOOD WRITING.

[Egan]

This is beautiful. As your reader you really took me for a ride. Great job with this!

[Angel's Lady]

Well done...you've created a scenario, held captive the audience, and closed in on your 'intentions'...
Beautifully and poetically written. Good job!

[Illegitimate Artist]

It's a very interesting piece. I really enjoyed the way you put it together, nice rhyming scheme. It really flows together. Makes me smile too, I can remember this kind of communication ^_^

[Sarah]

I love this! It's so upbeat & cute. o= Definitely put a smile on my face. ^_^ It perfectly captures the happiness and excitement of the start of a relationship, not knowing what will come out of it, and really not caring! (: Great job. ^_____^

[Mr. Deft Diction]

Is this something that's supposed to be a secret? Oooh....togetherness, sex and secrets! Nice.