Snow Kiss

And I am lost
In the feeling of
Non belief
The air is
Practically
Glittering silver

Silver and snow
On my hands
In the air
On my lips
As he walks away

On my lips
Where he kissed me
Through my hair
Where fingers went

Silver and silver
And silver and snow

Reviews

[krish]

ALSO THE GOOD ONE......CAN I SAY STH MORE ABOUT IT...
"'snow kiss,always gives me so bliss,
when u kiss my lips,without disssmiss,
silver & silver makes loke so cold wind,
always makes me so happy to kiss u coz..it's a god gift,
when ur's hairs went through ur's face's & flows like a mint,
silver & snow on mine hands,gives me fresh air,coz..it due to kiss on ur's lips.....''''

[Clockwork]

I like the idea of the silver in the snow. That establishes a very nice contrast with the color of the speaker's hair and lips in this poem. I thought of the repetition of the word silver almost as a representation of the falling snow. The third stanza was my favorite because of the tone; I could really imagine that one.

[Jessica Jean]

I didn't think of silver like that before. I like that!

[Clockwork]

I'm glad. Oh, and small typo in stanza two "Sliver." Just a small slip of the keys.

[Jessica Jean]

Oops thanks!

[Clockwork]

Welcome

[E.V. Black]

With the repeating word of "silver," I imagine a shimmering and glowing scene of snow in my mind. This poem lingers a soft sense of sweetness long after the moment has past. I love the sense of wistfulness and memory in this. Very pretty.

[Jessica Jean]

That's exactly what I wanted, thank you !