No Escape

When I came out of my depression I looked back on it and realized how I felt and I feel it could depict how some people used to feel or how they are feeling.

No Escape

All around is darkness.

This grim ink saturates the world.

At the end there is a light

that never seems to be reached.

 

Many have attempted to leave this ominous place

to find nirvana in the light,

but pain and sorrow follow them

wrenching at their soul,

never to be forgotten.

 

This dark isn't the normal dark of the night,

It's unlike any other.

You endure its creeping over your body,

clawing away at your skin,

and slowly submerging your mind.

Then, the light is forever out of reach.

 

You become a person you have never seen before.

The detrimental thoughts of your mind

your miserable emotions,

your worst nightmares,

they all become your life.

 

You are forever lost here in this somber world.

Alone you stumble around,

restless and weak.

Calling for a companion,

but never hearing a sound.

 

In the dark there is no escape.

You are forever confined in its grasp,

gradually losing all hope.

Humanity fades here in the dark

soon, the light will be just a myth.

                                                

Author's Note

what do you think of my diction choices? where could i change or reword things?

Reviews

[softlyfall]

Excellent the way you portray depression as a consuming monster. Wrenching in stanza two is a kind of confusing verb to use there as it is not really a word of outward action, more like a self directed action...you might think about something this monster would do...gnawing?
The use of forever is, well at least in retrospect, misleading. It certainly feels like forever at the time though.
All in all, really a great poem and welcome to the light. I went through a period of cathartic poetry after i came through the fire myself. It helped and I wrote some good stuff..but what happened after the catharsis was complete was better stuff so you have that to look forward to.