While I am broken

Time stumbles along,

Birds chirp their song,

While I am broken.

Author's Note

I appreciate any reviews good or bad!

Reviews

[DoormanDan]

Very concise, I must say! Poems like this usually don't grab my interest(because I find that a lot of them just don't have enough substance due to the way they are written), but the way you wrote this one is just pitch-perfect. This would probably be amongst the top 5 most relatable 3 lines in human history to anybody who has been through a rough time. The way you opened it up is probably the best line you could have started this with. It pulls the reader in by both being relatable and being a little artistic(but not TOO artistic), and the rest of it stays consistent. This is very impressive.

I say this poem deserves a 100/100

[Jocie de Jaune]

Wow! thank you so much! :) Can't begin to explain how much nice reviews like this mean to me. Really makes me want to keep on writing! I'm really grateful, thanks again!!!! :)

[Cheryl]

Short yet beautiful. Love it! :)

[Jocie de Jaune]

Thank you!x

[Chris]

Strange how life moves on around us...

Nice senyru.

[Kurai.Merodi]

Love it. Short but says a bunch

[Jocie de Jaune]

thanks Breen xxx

[Kurai.Merodi]

welcome Liberty =^w^=

[Leindor]

Wow. That ending stops and breaks, and I feel like I gain a much better understanding of what you are trying to share with me. It's like i'm going with the flow and smack into a brick wall. I love it!

[Jocie de Jaune]

Thank you so much! Really appreciate it!