SENSES IN CONFLICT

a short free verse

Your words were clear,

I heard them loud.

Your actions unencumbered,

I saw them so vividly.

My ears, they hear.

My eyes, they see;

Both are so perceptive,

But which should I believe?

Reviews

[Belle]

You just told me not to over think. Now, do you think I can read what this piece is trying to convey if I will not over think? As a reader, reading between the lines of this poem to draw interpretation is I believe more difficult than what the poetic persona had undergone while reading the person, (s)he was referring to, beyond his/her words and behavior to know what to believe in.

Senses in Conflict : Verbal versus Non-Verbal, be guided.
The senses of the poetic persona are in struggle in identifying what to believe : the words which has a mark of clarity and the action so vividly or the truth being seen by the persona beyond the words and actions which I believe are different from the spoken words.

Sir Joe, I must say, “ Brevity is the soul of the wit.”
Now, do I still need to say d*mn?! :)

[Sir Joe]

Throwback: have you just entered my mind? LOL

When you have problems, don't overthink. When you read, you may always overthink. hehehe
When reading is your problem, don't ever think. LOL

I guess this piece still needs some polishing.

Thank you for, should I say, "entering my mind", big sister. hahaha

[Belle]

"When you have problems, don't overthink. When you read, you may always overthink. "
At least clear enough for me. :)

"Have you just entered my mind? "
I did not, I just read you between the line, and I will do it when talking to you later on or tomorrow, be afraid! LOL

Honesty? I was thinking of Lady G, as your muse to this writing. It is not really easy to separate the poet from the poem while deciphering this piece.

Welcome back/home, bro. You've been missed, so we need to see each other, later? tomorrow?

[Sir Joe]

Tomorrow, we'll see each other hahaha
Many liars inspired me to create this poem hahahaha
read moreTomorrow, we'll see each other hahaha
Many liars inspired me to create this poem hahahaha
Thanks, big sis, for your honesty hahaha

[Belle]

Some text are missing, bro. I cannot open the "read more" blue words, but I think I understood what you were trying to say. Do not overthink bro, that is part of the nature of our business. :)

[Belle]

Wide awake still. Working with the syllabus? Ah--same here.

[Sir Joe]

hehehe Yeah, syllabus-making, still. tsk3 how about you? watchadoin'?

[Belle]

Just done with two syllabi, and now re-reading Beowulf. Ooops, don't ever laugh. I've read the tale when I was in High School; I just wanted to get back on the detail because I was amazed by the deconstruction done by Ed Sy.

[Sir Joe]

Wow! Good for you. I'm still down to 4 syllabi. =(

[J_Star]

You could have synesthesia and get a twofer, just for extra confusion :) Great poem.

[ENJOY A CUP OF COFFEE]

I love the vivid words, and vocabulary you used. Short, but detailed, I enjoyed, thank you.
.....Cheyanne

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Cheyanne. =)

[Pete Langley]

Yes, perception is all....but it sure does depend on how many senses are in use...and how sharp they are. Ultimately, we rely on the least tangible of all - intuition. A very intriguing piece. P.

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Sir Pete.
=)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

SJ, this is a short one but it really speaks volume. I'll just give my review based on those that come into my mind while reading the piece...

We are given that senses so that we can hear and see things around us. But have you asked yourself if you really see a thing in a way it is, or you let yourself believe in what you intend to see? And have you asked yourself if you really hear that voice in it's true sound, or you let yourself believe in what you intend to hear?

It's an irony that sometimes you have to close your eyes to see things deeper than what you could see...and you have to cover your ears to hear things louder than what you could hear. You have that heart to feel the sensibility of words...and you have that mind to think as to the rectitude of the acts.
Or maybe it is your own mind and heart which have this conflict and now giving you the wrong interpretations of what you see and hear?

I believe that you are a young and talented man. You are gifted with that understanding which others don't have. You can use it so that you can get out of that conflict.

Hear it from your lola. Lol. Peace be with you!

[Sir Joe]

Thank you for sharing your insights, Ma'am Dhaye!
=) Your review suggests that you're much gifted with the understanding that you've mentioned. =) You're a lola, then you're more experienced than I am.

Thanks for the review.

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

"You're a lola, then you're more experienced than I am."

Lol. It's not about age. There are younger ones who seems more experienced than older ones.

And I am not gifted with that understanding... Those words are what I always tell to myself. I just shared it to you.

You're welcome. :)

[Daisie Vergara (Dhaye)]

*who seem

[Sir Joe]

hehehe Then I must thank you for sharing them with me. =)

[Holly Mason]

believe the one...
that listens to the soul
believe the one...
that sees the soul
believe both...
one means not much without the other
a lovely read
thank you for sharing

[Sir Joe]

thank you so much, Holly

[Ruthie Igunbor]

i cant help trying to figure out what was going through your mind when you wrote this. some sort of dilemma?
i really like how relate-able this is for me.
Nice!

[Sir Joe]

Dilemma, it is! Thank you for taking some time to read this work of mine, Ruth. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

Strong and direct words in the poem. I like the strong and short statements. You made your point loud and clear in the poem. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sir Joe]

Thank you, Coyote. =)