birthday kiss

a quatrain for my creative writing class :)

Seventeen white candles placed atop her cake

she blows them out makeing her lungs ache

she turns around and recieves a birthday kiss

just him and her, pure bliss

Author's Note

constructive criticism would be much appreciated :)

Reviews

[He@ther!]

So pretty and sweet!!:)

[lauren emily]

Oohh..I like this. It's short and sweet and really good.
Great work,
~Lauren