deciever & believer

the consequences of a man living a lie
can be fatal
detail the details for me
please
explain the unexplainable
hallejua
i praise what i don't know
in a daze after just a stone's throw
incomprehensible
in solvents
dissovles
apparently
making the water murky
incomprehensible
dark and lush
grabbing ankles and burning bushes
all without a mark
what is stark
what is black and white
this is gray
for today and tomorrow
drowning in sorrow
harems complete
sinners and saints
flock
follows a shepard
who is also a sheep
selling cheap alienation
in our nation of aliens
hatred devouring light
all that can be left is a molecule of dust
for our mothers to clean.

 

Reviews

[Dara[DRAMATIC]]

Beautiful and strikingly true. I see the underlying message as an unearthing of hypocrisy.

[pinksnowboots]

I like this, but it is a little jumbled and unclear. I would make it clearer as to what the point is-also "hallejua" should be "hallelujah." Good start, with some changes it could be great!