left behind

06/2012

yea it's okay

         she has just 

lost her way

          while I've been

searching for the 

           most unseen

 

I've been embracing

           tragedy and many pains

from many things that

            we can't conquer

one lie after another

            never a moment

of solid ground

            nor contentment 

inside out I stood

            in the devouring

flame as she fell 

upside down

             like everything

around her  

             slowly to her death

taking her love

            away from me

so very

           far away 

from me

Author's Note

Reviews

[rivers]

Ouch...if I didn't have such a good memory this poem might not hit me at such an emotional level...This form is new in your writing, at least to me and I like it. The drum beat in the song reminds me a bit of the form, in a good way.
You always seem to nail your emotions with lyrics and phrasing that draws in the reader even though the emotions are dark...Nicely done Joshua

[Jinn Alexsander]

beautifully written, very painful piece,I love the imagery I'm getting.

[Katrina Mckeown]

well constructed piece of imagery in this immotive poem.

[Tate Morgan]

Now that works well Smiles good work!

[Sleeping Maiden]

Oww.. wow.. this hurts.. ouch.. it's such a wonderful poem though. the pain is very clear. Such an emotional piece! Nice job! And i love how you used the font as it is. It gives it a dark spiral downfall.. just like the theme of this poem.
Well done! I love it.

[GunMetal]

I love the format. The words themselves even appear to be falling. Well done.

[Dark Poetry]

A highly emotional poem, Love it.

[Shay]

High levels of emotion, very good. Like it alot

[Billie Atterberry]

wow amazing poem

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Puts me in mind of a relationship where one is completely lost in their addiction and their partner spirals out of control attempting to figure out how to fix something that is completely out of their control. Wonderful work Joshua.