Changing weather

Changing weather

A Poem by ayesha gupta
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tried to connect nature with emotions. enjoy..

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There was a time,
when it was cold,
and my feelings froze.

Snow all over the trees,
no birds, no flowers,
no sighting of a rainbow.

There was snowfall,
all over the hills,
I felt lonely and gazed the show.

When you came,
the sun rose beyond the horizon,
the sky turned amber hue.

Snow started melting,
and birds came out singing.
It is the beginning of spring, I knew.

You are the reason,
of my happiness.
You are the reason,
of this changing weather.
I love you so much. I really do.

© 2014 ayesha gupta


Author's Note

ayesha gupta
another love poem. i hope you like it.
review , rate, enjoy. :)

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Love is the only reason we are here on earth.

Posted 9 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

yes avinash. its true. :)
Love how it's worded!
Keep it up!

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thankyou so much. i m glad that you liked it.
Vivid description of winter cool....

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot. :)
nice connecting weather to love. a vivid poem with good imagery. well written!

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks, surya.
Great attempt at trying to connect love with nature...................Nature is lovely!!!

"There was a time,
when it was cold,
and my feelings froze.

Snow all over the trees,
no birds, no flowers,
no sighting of a rainbow. "

"When you came,
the sun rose beyond the horizon,
the sky turned amber hue.

Snow started melting,
and birds came out singing.
It is the beginning of spring, I knew.
"

you paint quite a painting here with your words.......
thank you for a delightful read!!!
i loved it!!!
:)

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot.
Pushkar Prabhat

9 Years Ago

you are welcome!! :) :)
This is really a powerful poem on divine love. All the six stanzas are superbly built made fantastically expressed except some changes or edit..as

You were the reason,
of my happiness.
And still you are
of this changing weather.
I love you so much. I really do

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thank a lot for suggestion and review. :-)
M.A.Rathore

9 Years Ago

And make the last stanza in three lines also..
just minor corrections... "no sighting of a/the rainbow" (2nd stana)
"the sun rose beyond the horizon" (4th stanza)
"and birds came out singing, it is..." (5th stanza)

Other than that, nice and simple poem! Great analogies xx

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks a lot.
I think, it will be better if you use i knew instead of i know at 5th stanza last line,............except that its good.I liked 3rd stanza very much...

Posted 9 Years Ago


ayesha gupta

9 Years Ago

thanks for review and correction.. :)

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Added on November 11, 2014
Last Updated on November 17, 2014
Tags: love, winter, spring, sun, sky, cold, lonely, happiness

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ayesha gupta
ayesha gupta

patna , bihar, patna, India



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