APHORISMS

A few thoughts about the world.

Life is for the living,

Life is for the loving,

Love is for the giving,

We do live vicariously,

Don't take things too seriously,

Let's make extinction extinct,

How? Let's have a think!

Work and pray for Peace,

For plebs and critters we keep,

Let's preserve more habitats,

For wildlife and people chaps,

Exile brainwashing dictators,

Breed positive motivators,

Redirect capitalism.

Too much conflict over 'isms

masks our real problems,

World makes too many munitions....

Create diverse solutions,

Too many mind pollutions,

Let's write some aphorisms,

Life is for the living,

Life is for the loving.

Author's Note

Feedback welcome.

Reviews

[Zephaniah Devon]

It needs some polishing but the foundation is there. I love the idea that you are trying to say. We're turning against each other and we need to remember that at the end of the day we are all human. We should be working together to preserve the beauty of this world, not fighting amongst ourselves. I wish that more people thought like you obviously do.
I've only just started writing poetry so I'm not an expert but I would maybe rearrange it a little bit. I would maybe put "Exile brainwashing dictators" and "Breed positive motivators" underneath "masks our real problems" and get rid of "redirect capitalism". The way you have it now sounds a bit disjointed. I liked your words choice though. They make the poem complex but still simple enough that you're not sitting there scratching your head wondering what on earth the author is going on about.