#Goals

My goal is to make you shake

Make you ache and quake with fear

When I walk in a room, all eyes on me

Five foot six, with heels to be six foot three

My goal is to make you feel

Make you lose touch with what's real

Am I a goddess or a fairy queen?

Or am I just your teenage dream?

My goal is to make you uncomfortable

The loudest voice at the dinner table

#Bossy #Queen #Psycho B***h

I'll be the most powerful witch

#Unapologetic

#Aesthetic

I'll be the greatest thing you've ever seen

The beauty queen of only eighteen

Sure I'll be your manic pixie dream

The muse with your art's new theme

But wait till I break from the mould

You realize I'm your very own fool's gold

Wait! Behold

The girl so bold

To never do as she's told

Too complex to be pigeon-holed

My goal is to make you see

The girl I am, the girl I'll be

Who's image you skew

Till I'm something you're used to

Reviews

[Closing Thoughts]

I have been meaning to review your new poetry all semester, because I feel like it’s important for me to encourage you in this. You are an amazing poet. The way you craft these emotions and experiences (whether you’ve experienced them yourself or not) is incredible. You are so talented. I adore modern poetry like this especially, it’s just something I personally enjoy. The incorporation of present day jargon, turning #(insert word here) into something that sounds poetic is so masterfully done here. The poem is relatable and actually hurts my soul a little bit. also the flow of this- the rhyme is so brilliant! It doesn’t sound forced or cheesy. It’s absolutely perfect. I love how the first stanza is the goal; I want to make you shake- the narrator want to be something GREAT something to be FEARED. And the last stanza is so impactful (the last two lines specifically) that no matter what you do, your image with be skewed into something less than. I feel like this poem really captures the idea of what a lot of girls go through currently. We are individuals. We are constantly pushed to “be original” and “be ourselves” and “be different”. We have this #goal in our mind of something we desire to be- something incredible. But in the end we just get swept up in this social media blitz and society sort of just writes everyone off and puts people in boxes. Anyway, I have a lot of feelings about this poem but overall I think it is expertly done.

[DayDreamer]

Love it, contrasts the fake world of the Internet and social media what what real life is really like - provoking reactions and making people really feel and think rather than just hiding behind a screen.
Rhyme is on point, and doesn't sound too forced.
Amazing!
Only improvement, maybe keep the 'my goal is' at the beginning of every stanza?

[Elwyn]

Tattoo this on my face. F**k me up. Dear God. This poem is fire.

First of all, grade A rhyme scheme. Secondly, it's too relevant. I know exactly how boys look at me... I'm not really a real person. I'm more than human and simultaneously less. I'm unattainable which is why they want to attain me. They build me down because I'm already built above their heads and that's the only way to reach me.

Beautiful, Julia.