..:pretty rain:..

The rain beautifully falls on her face..
travels about her eyebrows and friendly mingles with her long lashes;
falls softly to join the puddle just beneath her feet.

 the rain rolls down her cheeks

and traces over her lips...

_____

she's a pretty young girl;

 leads the way smoothly
as the subtle rain dances from the heavens..

 

she wipes her face of the rain with the back of her hand,
just before,
deciding not to even bother with her umbrella;

 

-she wants to feel the rain,
she wants to be one~with the pretty rain;....she tosses her umbrella aside,

carelessly giggles at the people standing beside her,
and the ones rushing to get inside the café crowned with news paper..

 

..she waits until a few people pass,
and then steps from underneath the canopy...

 

 

with a slight tug of the rubber band securing her hair;she frees it...
down it goes,
flowing as golden ribbons just shy of the small of her back,

 

 she unbuttons her trench coat about three buttons down..
..out she steps & feels the wet soak in;

into her hair,
and into her skin...

all pleasing to she...it softens her mood..

 

she plops her heels off her feet,
wiggles her toes,
and pats her feet in the puddle...and about comes a rhythm..

 ...she becomes her own chorus...with the pretty rain...

______

Pretty young girl...wild & free..
_____

she pats her feet in the puddle...about comes her rhythm

 

pretty young girl,
she becomes

whole; she becomes one..

...with the pretty rain....and she smiles pretty

 

...just like pretty rain...

 

-shean davis
a story, by way of poetry..

5.27-edit 9.23.9

Reviews

[Li Li]

I love the way you are able to unfold a story in such a way. You gave her such elegance. She had a lot of mystery, but we got this glimpse to follow her in the rain.

You have a strong sense of language. You use it in a way that I haven't seen on this site thus far. I admire your outlook. The way you can take a single pen and paint with so many colors.

Wonderfully done. I will have to make sure I read more.

Bless!
~Li

[Tenten]

it's so delicate but bold in a sesne, to my eyes atleast. the descriptions are beautiful. its a beautiful piece, like a woman would do this and if you where looking you'd miss the beauty of the entire actions. a great piece. i really love you writings. and i adore the rain.

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Very sweet, heartfelt. Pretty rain, seems the pretty rain was really the pretty girl. Good Write.

[The Autumn Faerie]

Very nice.
I, too, love the rain..

It's beautiful.
Great prose!