sensible shoes

i've walked a mile in my shoes,

and i'm pretty sure

i know myself.

 

your stilletos gleam like surgical knives.

 

sensible soles

and

sensible souls,

 

heel, toe - heel, toe.

 

work with me baby,

 

i can make you

 

a podiatrist dream.

 

or at least - a foot closer.

Reviews

[Holly Mason]

I find this to be quite sensible
what about heel toe, heal toe *) cause my toes would be killing me
in this world there are decisions to make -doesn't mean we all make sensible ones...with sole I mean soul*)
word play at it's finest...I could take this many places which I adore
thank you for sharing fine sir

[john alan willox]

Thank you Holly - always glad to hear from you - much appreciated

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Haha "-a foot closer." -- this line had me chuckling a little...wasn't sure if it was "a foot closer to me" or a "foot closer", as in the "closer who comes in to close a deal"...conceptually interesting.

My favorite bit of this one was the:

sensible soles
and
sensible souls,

A good bit of wordplay that wasn't ill used, rather it fed in to the overall metaphor quite nicely. I enjoyed the feel of this one; the flow was very nice and the imagery...well, I could see it.

[john alan willox]

Thank you Sarah - so glad you saw it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

a foot closer to ???

to me?

to knowing yourself?
to know me?

love it..

so many questions raised...so many ways to go...

like the abstractness here...my shoes want to walk towards different interpretations...but in the end, toward the stilletos that walk "heel-toe, heel, toe"

[john alan willox]

Thank you Jacob - interpretation is half the fun