Inside and Out

Inside and out

It would be nice if they were both the same

If my insides that tumble and shout

And my outsides that smile and tame,

Could get along, harmonize, resonate

Take a break from hiding all this hate

Inside of me

Unaware, I manipulate the scene

Change something plain to what I can't see

Manipulate, stretch out, and then lean

On truth to push it down; create the end,

The pretty picture itself will mend.

Outside of me

Refuses to take new information

If it makes its way in, it won't guide

Under my skin, there's obligation 

Why not open up emotions to vents

Instead of what you think would make sense 

Inside and out

It would be nice if they were both the same

If my insides that tumble and shout

And my outsides that smile and tame,

Could get along, harmonize, resonate

Take a break from hiding all this hate

Author's Note

Constructive criticism is much appreciated! :)

Reviews

[Rebecca]

I love the theme of this poem and the title definitely does it justice. Just in the last stanza it in "It would be nice it" should be changed to if. I like how you repeated the stanza and this would also make for a great song. Perhaps in the stanza, "My outsides" should start with "Outside of me" and maybe the second line in that stanza could also utilize the word "scene" like you did in the stanza before. Great word choices and it flows nicely! Keep on writing!

[Clara Kevie]

Thank you!! Your review was very helpful :)