Lonely Soul

Lonely Soul

A Poem by Kalpit

When you walk up the stairs,
you will see the emptiness,
pass through the empty hall,
there exists the lonely soul..

Sometimes lying on the bed,
a million thoughts in the head,
lots of feelings, never shown,
that's why its called the lonely soul..

Does not have anyone to share,
broken heart, no one to care,
it may seem under grown,
when you see the lonely soul..

Seldom walk out from the room,
it also has a wish to groom,
often expects someone to call,
to displace the tag. . . . 'The Lonely Soul..'

© 2011 Kalpit


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A lot of lonely souls in this world. Need a place to know happiness and find friendship. I like the wishes and the desire of the lonely soul. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 12 Years Ago


A lonely soul composes raw and powerful emotion for others to ponder on. Sometimes from said emotion great things come.

Posted 12 Years Ago


aww !!!! how touchy !! :D... really nice kalpit !! i loved it !! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


Nice way of telling such loneliness...Good work... :)))

Posted 12 Years Ago


Creative in presentation....and there is a lot of feeling and depth to this poem. I really enjoyed this.

Sometimes lying on the bed,
with millions thoughts in the head,
lots of feelings, never shown,
that's why its called the lonely soul.

I think we've all been there!


Posted 12 Years Ago


Really emotional, this one.

Posted 12 Years Ago


Good job...could feel the loneliness....

Posted 12 Years Ago


Calling the lonely soul...calling the lonely soul...come in...come in please...from the cold... (reminds me of the song Desperado by The Eagles...which is a GOOD thing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I really like the flow of this work. The flow helps with the images and bates the reader into the next sentences. Having said that there are a few very small english problems like, "When you walk up on the stairs" why use the word "on". The flow is better without it and the image is the same.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Added on October 28, 2011
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Kalpit
Kalpit

Jaipur, Rajasthan, India



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