My daughter Nicole

I have a daughter named nicole,who I adore and love much more.

    It hurts me to see her feeling so sad and blue, so confussed of her life of what to do,

 It's never easy when you have to pick and choose.

    Don't ever let him tell you what to do,

cause in your heart you know whats true.

    Don't always believe what they say

cause some of them will hurt you in someway.

    They seem like they know it all

But deep inside they have there own flaws.

    When a man is miserable and their life is filled with lies

There holding all there hurt inside.

     Their filled with uncertainty and not happy too,

So don't let them bring you down to.

      When a man feels less of a person and they become mean

it's because it is'nt the way they wanted there life to be.

      They try to bring you down to all there hurt and pain

Hoping you will feel the same way.

      Don't let him hurt you no more,

just move on with your life cause there's much more in store.

      She has this wonderful heart to,I hope one day she'll see all the joy and happiness and know I have been blessed and this is all true.

Reviews

[Wildfleour]

Oh my....Karen, I can completely relate to this poem, as my eldest daughter is going through something so similar. It is so hard for us to let them "walk through it", but we must.

[ganymeder]

What a lovely poem you wrote for your daughter. I'm sure she'll treasure it always. :)

[alyssa]

i love it!! its soo good... i bet a lot of prople could relate to that

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Again, grammer and spelling seem to be an issue here. "a man" would be "his". One cannot have "a man" and then "their" or "they're". There is no "they" in "a man". Singular tense requires a singular object. You have a poetic mind but your basic English skills need improving. I would strongly reccomend studying some basic grammer and usage from your local library's selection. It will strengthen your writing and improve your work tremendously. Again, I like the heartfelt quality of the writing. I hope you wish to to present that quality in the grammer, spelling and usage that your feelings deserve.

[Sydelle Houston]

This is a very strong poem, just one suggestion: use grammar and spell check while typing which will show you where words like "there, they're and their" should be placed.

[Sarah]

I really loved this poem. I think you captured the longing that mother's feel to teach their children all that is good about life - and make sure that they have the best possible life. Even though I'm still young, I honestly can't wait to be a mother. :) Great job with this!

[Michael V]

Howso true the advice of a mother is in this matter. So much said but rather delicatley and in an understanding way. Simply beautiful.