Wife's Cryptic Sound

sad story

im cryptic with my words, my feelings are suppressed

truth is what i wanted, so i put him to the test

no really I'm ok, my commitments they can wait

I cancel my appointments, and push back all my dates

im tired, pale, and sick, should i bother for a ride

but cryptically i ask, so ill have him by my side

he declines my one request, I'm busy you'll be fine

call me if you want, ill come by if i have time

the drive is long and silent, i wished he had come

assurance i seek now, but all i feel is numb

the longing in my heart, has waited many years

I'm cryptic with my feelings, explains for all my tears

im scared and feel alone, it shouldn't be this way

my life is closing in, the ending to my day

tonight i won't be cryptic, tonight ill make a stand 

as of now I'm dying, my toes will touch the sand

i asked and begged for years, and always he declines

were busy at the office, this isn't the right time

i always made excuses, for the distance that he held

he didn't want to fight, raise his voice and yell?

i put the car in park, the door it shuts behind

i walk into the kitchen, shocked to what i find

the crying of a man, my husbands foreign sound

my darling I'm so sorry, death has made us bound

Reviews

[kelvin]

very deep work here we tend to take for granted the best things in our lives to a point where sometimes it can't even be fixed. this is a sad hardship one goes through sometimes just because the other is ignorant to the fact good writing as always keep writing fellow writer

[Kaylor Mason]

Life is harsh. Anyone that claims otherwise is a poor salesman

[Adam :P]

powerful

[Forest Green]

incredible...moving, powerful...

what else can one say...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very sad...we don't know what we have until we are about to lose it.

and then it is too late to show appreciation and regard.

life passes us by, and sometimes, we're not even in it.

engaging, interesting poem.

jacob

[Layley Lu]

Whoa!
This has all the impact of a sledgehammer to the heart.
Makes me instantly wary of my own cryptic bent.
The punch of this poem falls full force following good consistent rhymes throughout. The subject was fleshed out in lucid and mature language, had a suitably sombre tone with a glaze of tenderness that simply makes for a piece of writing that will be hard to forget.
Well done.

[layla]

Thank you so much! your words are encouraging!