letting go

Letting go of a abusive relationship is hard but so beautiful.

I've been told there's an angel In the room
Where Is this godly beauty that you talk of
I must have a blind fold on for I do not see anything in the room
But you and me
You say it shines like the sunrise
But all I see is the dark clouds that cover me
I see no light just the night
Strangers from far Ans wide say I'm blind
They say its the dark mist from your love that
Keeps me from seeing the beauty with in me
Should I step away from your side to see
Or shall I stay and be contint with your lie
So I shall step away but just for a sec
I am as curious as the cat
So now that I'm away
I can finally see
I am finally moving
there's so much to see
I sometimes wish you were still with me
But now I am free.

Reviews

[Chris]

"Strangers from far Ans wide say I'm blind" - Ans?
"Keeps me from seeing the beauty with in me" - within, one word?
"contint" - content?

I feel I understand where you took this one ...might I suggest it may have more intensity and power if you somehow sectioned it? Not necessarily "forced" stanzas of same length, size, or appearance; I mean sections of discovery and action and aftermath. This would empower your intent and allow for more emotion to be infused within your thoughts. Least in my opinion.

[Shaun Payton]

Abuse is horrible. Ive known women who felt this freedom eventually, you captured it well.

[Sami Khalil]

"I am as curious as the cat
So now that I'm away
I can finally see
I am finally moving
there's so much to see
I sometimes wish you were still with me
But now I am free."
Beautiful and expressive ...Well done...:)

[Cassie]

This is beautiful.