Bautiful eyes

Those sparkling blue eyes, 
intoxicating like wine. 
I can stare at them all day, 
they are my holy shrine... 
Every time I see you around, 
my fate starts to shine. 
I'm not joking my dear, 
I want to make you mine... 

Eyes blue as an ocean, 
so beautiful and so deep. 
let me be lost forever in it, 
I'd never ever let you weep... 
I'll take care of everything, 
even when life gets steep. 
Every night I will kiss your lips, 
before you go to sleep...
 
Your eyes are so deceptive, 
they trick me every time. 
I wanna be with you forever, 
but maybe it's just not my time... 
Falling for your eyes, 
was my only crime. 
How naive of me? 
You will never be mine...

Reviews

[kategarcia577]

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[Abilash Uttama]

Nice piece, craving for someone even if we are trying in vain.

[Elisa]

Ooooooooh plot twist! Ah, our good old friend unrequited love. Girl I totally feel you. This is a very relatable poem. This piece has some great images in it, but I think adding some more sophisticated diction would make it even better. Of course, if simplicity in your choice of words was what you were going for, then who am I to tell you to change it? That kind of stuff is a stylistic choice. Another stylistic choice is the rhythm. When I was reading this, I thought some of the rhythm was a little bit off from the rhythm of the previous lines. But again, if that's what you were going for, then you go girl! Stylistic choices all boil down to what the poet is trying to do with their piece. The last three lines of this poem were my favorites. The definity of the last line is so sad. Sorry this review was all over the place, but overall, I liked your poem. Keep on writing :)