God

a poem about my religious struggles

Hands shaking 

Heart aching

All the smiles I’ve been faking 

I am yours for the taking 

If only you'd take me in. 

My God, my last friend. 

Take me. 

Don't turn your back 

Please don't forsake me 

I'm still your child. 

though my heart’s grown wild

And spread out like ivy vines

Has touched everything that lives and dies 

Searching for peace sweet, divine. 

But has yet to find it 

Searching honestly

Looking beneath all I see

Searching for what I don't. 

Caring for those who won't

Can't care for me. 

Boys I've run to in search of love 

But still I haven't found it 

I've looked east and west

North and south plus all that surrounds it 

I

've done my utter best. 

When can my tired soul rest? 

Find peace in the sleep I crave 

Savior come to seek and save, 

That's what I've always been told 

By a book 2000 years old 

By men in pulpits with suits 

By men in the pits with signs 

By the sun that falls but always rises. 

Your word Your and Your will 

comes in all sizes 

All forms and shapes 

So why am I so lost 

My lips move as I pray

As I stumble every day… fall onto my knees 

Asking for forgiveness on the ground. 

amongst the brown dead leaves 

Amongst my broken faith. 

I search for you my God. 

Won't I ever see you? 

Let your light shine through 

Heaven shine on me.

So that maybe I might be 

Better than yesterday.

Reviews

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I think we can all relate to this from time to time, some days can get us real down, either being disappointed with our selves or something negative happens. Know that God is always there to hear your prayers and He is listening even if it doesn't seem like He is answering them right away, remember God acts in His perfect time (I have to keep reminding myself this all the time lol).

Good Job

[John Byrd]

Love this poem. I feel the exact same way sometimes. It's good to know that God is always there :)

[A. Amos]

MomzillaNC said it all, you have potential keep writing my friend...All the best!

[MomzillaNC]

Thank you for sharing that, for putting into words the struggle we all go through time and again, and hopefully always find our way through.

I think this would flow better visually if it were broken into stanzas. I know my old eyes sometimes have trouble following lines all crowded together.

There are some typos and minor edits though. I took the liberty of making the corrections for you -- I didn't change anything, just did some copy editing.

Hands shaking 
Heart aching
All the smiles I’ve been faking 
I am yours for the taking 
If only you'd take me in. 
My God, my last friend. 
Take me. 
Don't turn your back 
Please don't forsake me 
I'm still your child. 
though my heart’s grown wild
And spread out like ivy vines
Has touched everything that lives and dies 
Searching for peace sweet, divine. 
But has yet to find it 
Searching honestly
Looking beneath all I see
Searching for what I don't. 
Caring for those who won't
Can't care for me. 
Boys I've run to in search of love 
But still I haven't found it 
I've looked east and west
North and south plus all that surrounds it 
I've done my utter best. 
When can my tired soul rest? 
Find peace in the sleep I crave 
Savior come to seek and save, 
That's what I've always been told 
By a book 2000 years old 
By men in pulpits with suits 
By men in the pits with signs 
By the sun that falls but always rises. 
Your word Your and Your will 
comes in all sizes 
All forms and shapes 
So why am I so lost 
My lips move as I pray
As I stumble every day… fall onto my knees 
Asking for forgiveness on the ground. 
amongst the brown dead leaves 
Amongst my broken faith. 
I search for you my God. 
Won't I ever see you? 
Let your light shine through 
Heaven shine on me.
So that maybe I might be 
Better than yesterday.

[cellardork]

dear lord, you did not have to do that. :) but thank you i appreciate it. wow. so nice.

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome. And, it was no big deal. It was only a bit of copy editing, not content. It was easier to make the edits than to find and tell you about each one. :D

[cellardork]

ha ha, you are too legit.