Man of today

More like a runt, so please read it as an abstract!

His eyes like liquid Helium, darted onto HIS enemy.

The knife was lifted up…

By him.

His expression darkened. A more sinister look obscured his pallid face.

He was a perfect specimen of evil. He was what people referred to as a ‘murderer’.

The word ‘murderer’ derived from him.

Countless murders, he  had done. Countless lives he took away.

His expression tightened. A threatening look draped his monochrome face.

He smiled with wide-open eyes. He was what people called a ‘psycho’.

The word ‘psycho’ derived from him.

Innumerable murders, he had done. Innumerable lives he took away.

His expression loosened. He held up the knife in his hand.

He did not hesitate. He was what people called ‘merciless'.

The word ‘merciless’ derived from him.

Limitless murders, he had done. Limitless lives he took away.

He dug the knife into his enemy’s body…

The enemy was murdered. His life taken away…

By him.

And, thus, he was what people called ‘human’

Reviews

[Lorraine]

I didn't quite expect the ending to be that way. I was expecting a different adjective but as it is, well, I was surprised. Nice read.For a story I think it's short but you've made the point there and that's what matters. I like the way you developed the story from start to end and the repetition of phrases with slight changes. Good Job.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Buni]

this is a really good write! shows the evil side of a human! very well written!

[Ravenskald]

review same poem
r=c, add an s title with Woe ....

THis eyes like liquid Helium, darted onto THIS enemy.

The knife was lifted up�

By hims. her choir

THis expression darkened. A more sinister look obscured This pallid face.

SHe was a perfect specimen of evil. SHe was what people referred to as a 'murderer'.

The word 'murderer' derived from him.

Countless murders, She had done. Countless lives She took away.

THis expression tightened. A threatening look draped This monochrome face.

THey smiled with wide-open eyes. SHe was what people called a 'psychologist'.

The word 'psychiatrist' derived from Shimmys and Shame.

Innumerable murders, She had done. Innumerable lives She took away.

THis expression loosened. SHe held up the knife in This hand.

SHe did not hesitate. SHe was what people called 'merciless'.

The word 'merciless' derived from hi manuscripts.

Limitless murders, She had done. Limitless lives She took away.

SHe dug the knife into his enemy's body�

The enemy was murdered. THis life taken away�

By This mob.

And, thus, She was what people called 'inhuman'