This Hole Called my Heart

Let your tears flow with the tide
They don't know your heart
They don't know your heartbreak
They don't know that every time you breathe you ache
Because you left a headache in my heart and a heartache in my head
I wish you knew how broken you made me
Because maybe
Just maybe
You would come back
Can you please help me out of this hole that I know call my heart
Its so dark in here
And its so cold
So very cold
Will you make it better?
Because it hurts so bad
Can you please understand?

Reviews

[Trace]

A relationship is like a carton of milk in the fridge.....
Once it goes bad, you have to go get another carton.
No matter how many times you put the old one back in the fridge.

It will never be good again.

Hello from Utah
Trace

[Nadia B.]

Another brilliant poem, so many people write about this subject but you have captured something here I have not seen before. Your use of repetition is very strong, and where generally I would think one should use different words to say the same thing, how you structure it just somehow makes it all work. Very talented. For example, something simple as "Because maybe, just maybe," this could be said in so many ways but the precise place you put it in your poem and the emphasis you give it by writing it on its own line, makes it stand out, and gives it a deeper meaning. The line "headache in my heart and heartache in my head," classic! You capture exactly how it feels, without having to use a bunch of complex words and meanings and explanations, you really understand the essence of what you want to come across and the reader does get it, the reader does understand. (In case this poem is about you then I do hope your heart heals, holes like these will heal, and in the meantime *gives bandaid*.) Please keep writing and thanks again for sharing!

[C. Lee Battaglia]

This is such a good poem! There is so much emotion and has such a great flow to it...
keep up the great work kenzie!!!

C. Lee Battaglia

[Jamestown]

Well penned with raw emotion,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[sereenaoutloud]

Heartache can leave a big gapping whole that make us fall into darkness..but time does heal the wound !
Writing helps too lol :)
Great write Kenzie!!

[closed]

heartbreak is the worst feeling ever
and sometimes you would give anything to feel better from it

at least we can always write our problems away


amazing poem

-Dream

[K.M]

I hope you guys like this poem :) sorry that it is so depressing