what a day

It's my latest song . I'm confused . forgive the dirty words.

what a day!!!!
scared of death or scared of life
how do I exactly think ?
wanna come out or wanna dive
I see life black or pink ?
'cause I don't know anything
except for that I know nothing
do I wanna rise or I wanna fall
do I wanna win or lose it all
I'm not sure
what I'm living for
so I say
that all I get here is bullshit
and I don't know how to quit
out of this cloudy day
and walk to find my way
what a day what a day
I don't give a damn anyway
every new day has a new battle
but my life sure doesn't suck
and all I get is way too little
but I don't give a f**k
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do I get it right or I get it wrong
do I feel weak or I fell strong
do I have your love or I have your hate
is it just me or sadness feels great
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Author's Note

It's not a poem . it's a song .....ok . don't get pissed off.......if anyone has an idea how to compose it ......it maybe better than mine.....so just contact me if you have

Reviews

[John Cardwell]

Props for the courage to bare your soul to the world. The verses do a great job of conveying not only confusion but significant frustration. The chorus is great. The whole song rocks. I can hear it as music when i read it. e.g. "Do i get it RIGHT or I get it WRONG..." with CAPS on the downbeat 4/4. Musically versatile, I can see it fitting with heavy Drum & Bass Hip-Hop, Anthem Rock, Punk. And lastly - dirty words. You are a poet; entitled to use whatever words or combination of words that best convey your idea or feelings. eg. "But I don't give a whistle" would have trivialized your feelings. "F**k" was the right word.

[Gamitsuki]

Junk is absolutely right.......it is a well woven song.....the web of words you have used here are making an exquisite effect.......this song will surely fill the atmosphere with reality in your friend's party.... good luck..!!