BETRAYAL

There is nothing more disheartening than a partner, who without any prior warning leaves you.

I woke up and you,

my dissembling one,

gone, no trace

to pick up,

follow, lingered in

absent presence, hoping

I was at last mistaken,

but cast-iron reality,

wedged  

in nook and cranny

of a shrunken existence,

dissected

by your express design,

planned in secret

before trusting eyes,

and now I dream

in empty thoughts

of spurned love,

 awake,

and not wanting to be.

Reviews

[KarMarBar]

This is beautiful, well-written poem. I particularly enjoyed how you set up your stanzas. I needed to read something like this because I am going through something similar, so thank you.

Would you mind reviewing my poems?

[Bill Grimke-Drayton]

Of course I will, Karen. Thank you so much for your comments on both poems. How about reading some of the short stories. For example, THE VISIT, or MR PONTEY.

[KarMarBar]

I was just browsing through those now :) You're a great writer!

[Bill Grimke-Drayton]

Karen, I could throw my laptop on to the floor. I reviewed one of your poems, and got to 10 points, and guess what happened! Everything was suddenly deleted. So I will try again.

[Bill Grimke-Drayton]

I have only been writing since the beginning of this year.

[KarMarBar]

Wow! I've been writing for about 22 years and some of your writing is better than my own! I'm so glad you found your nitch in writing, because it sure suits you well.

[KarMarBar]

Wow, I didn't know it did that. Thanks for getting to 10 points!! Sorry you have to re-write it all. I sincerely appreciate it, though.

[Bill Grimke-Drayton]

Have just done it!!

[KarMarBar]

I read it, thank you. I replied to your review. It was like you completely understood where I was coming from!! Thank you so much!!