Kissing Coffee

Grab a cup of coffee and sit down in the street corner with me :)

Forget about a cup joe. Have you ever thought of coffee as women?

 

Not that hard to imagine, actually. You pick the girl of your choice off the menu, talk to her gently until she’s willing to enlace you with her scent, lastly pluck up your lips and embrace her kiss fully.

 

No pressure to pleasure an entire court of mistresses. No argument for who the king sleeps with tonight. No crap about how bad you are at sex; hey, it was a one night stand anyways, and their tongue games are always tasty.

 

Try Cappuccino, the hooded Italian maiden dressed in milky steam dress. The delicate latte art shines like gold silk woven over her white hood as her aroma drifts close, her seducing body shy as one undresses the virgin body within.

 

Latte-Cappuccino’s European older sister. Experienced she is with men, she seduces her guests aggressively by strong caffeine and warm breasts before luring them towards her ancient doorstep.

 

Espresso in contrast, is a spoiled, daring little brat. Her steam punches first, her inexperienced kiss bitter. There isn’t one thing this girl wouldn’t dare do, from sacking you up early in the morning to keeping you up late at night. Yet, you wouldn’t dream think about pushing her away.

 

Americano isn’t as spoiled as Espresso; she’s generous and gives away almost twice the filling. Lain down on the mattress with eyes closes you know there is no hurry. Easy come, and easy go, her popularity is her crown.

 

Lastly, my favorite Flavored Coffee milady. Different gemstones gifted from their brewer’s womb, unique skin and spice according to local tastes. Take her hand while stepping off your plane and let her introduce you to her world!

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Richard Linsley III]

There was once an author who penned a reason "why we call ships of the sea, She" For this reason, I was intrigued to read your work here. I'm not sure I would call it a story, or an exposition, perhaps a poem. You draw some great parallels between the different cultural mindsets and you seem to have some experience with European mindsets; which is refreshing.

What follows is only for when you start reviewing the work for editing and smoothing:

I'd worry about the use of grammar. Minor mistakes throughout, if you want I can point you in the right direction for a book that actually helps people find and correct their writing mistakes.

"No pressure to feed an entire court of mistresses." I might change "feed" to "pleasure" to continue with your thought of romantic interlude. This even has a "Don Juan" type feeling to it.

"Experienced she is with men" = Japanese grammatical syntax. "She is experienced with men" is correct English Syntax but also loses some of the impact I felt with the original. If it was intentional to use it in the original syntax then awesome. There might be another way to reflect the same feeling however.

Americano isn’t as spoiled as Espresso; she’s generous and gives away almost twice the filling. - "Feeling"? versus "Filling?"

"on the mattress with eyes closes" - "on the mattress with eyes closed"

" Easy come, and easy go " - I'm torn on this one, "Easy come, easy go" is the correct syntax; however, its your speech patter that makes this work.

I'd review the last paragraph. It honestly feels unfinished, as if you want to say more about her as if you were torn between being with her and writing this work.

[Kirasoul]

Thank you very much for the long review Richard!!

Yes, I think that "pleasure" would fit this sentence a lot more than "feed", many thanks for your suggestion :)

I will continue to think about the "Experienced she is with men" verse until I find the perfect line.

The Americano line is based off a mildly racist joke "Americans always add water into their coffee and wine to make it twice as large", that was the main reason I chose "filling" as in "twice the filling" XD

Pardon my last paragraph, I think I was tipsy over five cups of coffee back then and decided to leave it as it was to serve as a memory bookmark :)

Again, thank you for taking your time to review my work！

[Richard Linsley III]

I don't find the joke racist at all, actually it pokes fun at the capitalist notions that are shared in America. Haven't heard that one before but I definitely can connect with it.

[Michaela]

This is so creative! I am fueled by coffee, and so my love of coffee instantly had me drawn in by your title, then the first line makes it so I had to read on. Reading your descriptions of the coffees I found myself smiling a little, able to completely visualize each one. Not only were you able to capture their beauties but also a little bit of their personalities. I loved reading this. A good change from the love poems, and other things I've been reading lately. This is very awesome!

[MeithaSoekotjo]

Inspiring!
I wonder, how is coffee from the girls mind set.
Thanks for sharing the poem!