The Chess Game.

The oldest of conversations and the most new.

"Ah, my old friend, it comes to the last piece again.” the room, dark as always felt bare as in time everything did. The hole of sanction leaps forth from time and space to guide the hands that move wooden figures around the chess board. They stare at each other, a father searching for a glimpse of love in his son's eyes. There is nothing, nothing but the pit that housed his fear and contempt, all he held dear was gone, lost forever in a time confused by the very ones he created. This dear sweet boy, deformed by the minds and thoughts of those that kept him alive, for no reason but to haunt them.

 

 

"Why, why must I fight for this one piece? Of all things I can grant you, my riches are known only to the powerful and all could be yours and yet you dwell here and want the one thing I can never give you. You yourself have a home, a land, and one I might add that you use as a prison for those willing to enter, why?”

 

 

This child, defiant as always remained silent and merely looked into the eyes of his maker. One final piece, the last piece that always ended their game. A tiny orb of blue, nothing, full of wonder but tiny to ones such as these. He wanted it for his own, this ungrateful son, always looking for ways to outsmart his father, to trick the mind that honours truth above all else.

 

 

"Tell me, tell me now, you never move those lips to utter words to me, for once, use that wicked tongue of yours!"

 

 

He moved, calling another draw, he looked at his father and spoke softly, "Yes, my dear maker, you can grant me everything I desire except the one thing I want and need, what is it they call you again, father, oh yes, the earth calls you God".

 

 

"That is ones doing Lucifer, you turned their prayers to me and I will answer them, go back until we play again, and go back to hell"

Author's Note

The eternal game.

Reviews

[VennelaMargame]

I'm reminded of what Chekov (I believe) said about a story. You need two characters, male and female (meaning opposites) and an ashtray for them to talk over. I suppose this is quite the ashtray then, ha ha!

It's rather an old Testament oriented view of the situation, but I like that. Even though I'm an atheist, the Bible is full of wonderful and intriguing stories, and is a source of endless inspiration for philosophical writing. Nice little story.

My criticism is that it's a little heavy-handed in setting up the conflict towards the beginning, with the "nothing, nothing...etc."

Best wishes, friend.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[Devanshu Rajput]

i was bit confused till last...but after a while i understood the great,excellent piece of writing...fab piece of writing behind words...lovely piece...keep writing.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you

[Devanshu Rajput]

your welcome

[quinfinn]

i want the world and i want it now! sorry, but it belongs to me.... it is the eternal game, just as you say in your notes. good vs evil.....god vs satan.....very cleverly thought out and nicely penned!

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Thank you.

[sarah]

I was kinda confused but I then got it great write!

[Collette Paige]

I like this one very much. I found myself thinking 'how could I write better...How could I write like this?' through all of it.
And when I reached the end, I was pleasently surprised on how subtle you made the connections. Very good.

[Taylor Williams]

AHHHHH yess i love this story. It kept you guessing and at the very end revealed itself to be a game between god an lucifer for earth. Great great work.

[Maya Storm]

lol... oh but we are merely pawns in the great game of life!
Ridiculously radical story you have here Mr Fitzgerald... loving it!

[K.]

Oooh, I love the ending. Very well-done, I must say. Very well-written. I'd like to see more of this.

[argentum lumen]

I was totally confused until the end, but that's part of what made it a good write because you want to know what the conversation is about. Just putting this out there the end left me still wondering what exactly is it that he wanted. If it was intentional you got your desired result. That's all for now.

[Muse]

brilliant, I admit that you had me a bit confused until the end. God.....if Lucifer has a son, we are all in trouble. :)

[Jake Donald Stephens]

This is cleverly presented. I like the concept of it. Whether someone believes in these deities or not, it is thought provoking either way. Thanks for sharing.

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