Turn to Me

 

If scarlet streams stain your wrists

I’ll be there to heal the wounds.

If you find yourself freefalling

I’ll be there to catch you.

If you find yourself with a gun in your hand

I’ll be there having taken the bullets out already.

So, if you’re feeling down,

Turn to me,

Because your life means

The world to me!

 

Copyright©JosieWentzel26May2009

Reviews

[Patrick Ramsey]

I like the line "If scarlet streams stain your wrists.' The rest are sweet, but I think they could be more powerful metaphors. Repetition (If you) is often a good thing, but it feels to short and too many cliches ("find yourself freefalling," "I'll be there to catch you," "if you're feeling down").

I found "If you find yourself with a gun in your hand, I'll be there having taken the bullets out already" also to be poignant, although that line doesn't feel as tight as I think you could probably make it.

Nice sentiments and emotion!