Haze

I turn to haze
Only you know what the poison weighs 
Close my eyes and who do I see?
Disconnected from reality
Open the gates, let in the haze

Take me on a ride
Not for me, but for you to decide
Unattached from fear
Take me on a ride
Anywhere but here

Where I go is the same
Unexplored terrain
Free from the chase
Free from the race

I am the haze
You, the sun rays
Open the gates, let in the haze.

 

Reviews

[Daydreamer]

Only you know what the poison weighs

Take me on a ride
Not for me, but for you to decide

I am the haze
You, the sun rays
Open the gates, let in the haze

These lines were the best of this whole elegant piece ♥
Easy to take in as well as mesmerising💘
Keep writing poetry of this type,please😁

[klawrites]

Thank you so much!! Thanks for the support! I have written more, will post soon :)

[Alex Boyd]

This would make a nice song Jhene Aiko would like this Nice!!!!!!!!

[Derty Steve]

Definitely one of my favorites from what what you have chosen to share so far. I can relate to living in a "haze" my Tumblr is actually "hazedreaming." I can very much relate to feeling like you need someone to escape it, the last few lines were my favorite:
"Where I go is the same
Unexplored terrain
Free from the chase
Free from the race

I am the haze
You, the sun rays"
but "Open the gates, let in the haze" was a little confusing to me.
Do you enjoy being the haze? or do you want to be something different with the help of the sun rays?

[Lizzie Mitchell]

This was soothing to read
I could meditate on this for a bit

[klawrites]

Perfect :) That's exactly the feeling I was trying to express! Drifting away...staying present. xo

[Asb]

Loved it....
Specially the last two line ....
Keep sharing...



Peace!

[klawrites]

Thank you so much!

[M]

I love the analogy in this poem and the use of words. Such a great idea Keep going :) u r a great writter..

[klawrites]

That means a lot to me! Thank you :)

[RileyRedding]

How lovely. What was you inspiration for this piece?

[klawrites]

Thank you :) I like playing around with the idea of being completely present. I'm always inspired by music, I feel this connects to some classic tunes, such as Mr. Tambourine Man and Purple Haze.