Inebriation

 

Your substance is sweet, I watch you retreat

to the bottom, like the ocean’s waves from a beach.

Lethe flows in your veins, when you’re gone nothing remains.

Such effortless artifice follows your touch.

You enhance; you destroy – I can’t discern which one is which.

But you pour you heart out as I do the same.

For the moment you bring pleasure – pleasure fades into pain.

Reviews

[Sethnicity]

Well put mi lady, well put!

[Brjden (Bridge-Den) Cre..]

A wonderful portrayl of what inebreiation feels like especially with love.

"You enhance; you destroy � I can't discern which one is which."
Very wonderfully written and I wish it were longer! Great write Krystal!

[Bud]

Ah! The sanctuary found in a drink...yet the imprisonment that follows. Such is the curse brought on by a curse. Outstanding piece! Bravo!

[J. A. Svercek]

I'm browsing through the list of new writing, and this is one of the few good ones. If I could make any suggestions: vary sentence structure and perhaps rewrite the ending, as it seems a weak close to a very insightful piece. Great stuff, thanks for writing.

J.