Timeline of a Love Life

this sucks, but i'm trying to get back into the swing of poetry.

Brandon was the first.

The one who opened my eyes.

Love like a cocoon that burst,

and out flew butterflies.

 

Then there were many,

 Jonathan, James, and Dustin.

Faceless names common as a penny,

and worth almost nothin’.

 

Along came Charlie,

A simulated bond at best.

Hallucinogens made me love him,

in and out of consciousness.

 

Fonder the heart grows,

when one does not get her fill.

Feelings for him unexpectedly rose,

yet stood a mirage still.

 

Introduced to Jeremy,

a platonic significant other.

Both of us needed much more,

but never took it further.

 

Faceless names press on,

Faceless names stubbornly persist.

Another Dustin, a Josh here and there,

but my heart showed resist.

 

Then his dark eyes met mine,

I instantly gave my heart away.

A love lost beyond all my control,

to the one who’s name it hurts to say.

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I really like this weaving though the many faces of love...

Along came Charlie,
A simulated bond at best.
Hallucinogens made me love him,
in and out of consciousness.


that stanza was great... sometimes we fall for people who aren't what we seem but what we make them out to be, that is a hard crash.

Very emotionally written.

[East of Eden]

this poem has great character. i didn't see the need for the second last stanza it felt like it interrupted the flow. the first, third n last stanzas were beautiful!

[Mariah]

I've never read a poem quite like this, and liked how you used specific names. It made it real.


'Along came Charlie,

A simulated bond at best.

Hallucinogens made me love him,

in and out of consciousness.'


The ending verse is perfect, I love it.

[Realm of Gray]

Odd how those faceless, nameless people mean so much to us at the time though. We always believe the current love to be the one for all time, and it is not until we experience that true, forever love, that we are able to distinguish the difference. I like the timeline thing here which simulates a growth of feeling and maturing of spirit.

[Bubo]

Incredibly moving.We seem to meet many potential mates on our life journey, but always somehow know when the true one comes we give everything, often unprepared for the pain it will bring,....i enjoyed this.

[Ryan Jaimz Knight]

This poem actually reminded me of a situation I am coming out of where I realized that I was in love with someone who is a noted pain in my backside, and someone who due to extenuating circumstances I cannot become involved in. This poem will speak to anyone who is living with a deep love for another who does not feel it in kind, or because of what-have-you cannot return it because of the problems doing so would cause. It takes a lot to capture an emotion like that, you've done it with finesse. Keep up the good work!

RJK

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very well written poem. I never thought of love as being a timeline, but it makes sense. Beautiful description. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Meradee]

There are always so many faceless names and they really cease to matter when that one who comes out of the woodwork finally shows up. The one who's voice brings tears to your eyes, and smile makes your heart melt. Of course you'll always wonder if he'll break your heart and never look back. Nicely written. :)
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