Poor Shadow

Poor shadow,
whose soul's unknown,
looming in phantasm
of nights ambiguity.
The world has eyes,whose vision
bend with thy movement.
Stirring its imagination,
prisoner of shapes and light that hit.
Whose mind thinks of concrete illusion
that circumnavigate the soul and shadow in confusion


Poor shadow,
owned by soul hidden,
sneaking against noctilucent light.
The world is oppugnancy, deceived by its
ability to perceive light that flickers, a consciousness.
Who opt to see shadow as reality, and soul as blemish of fantasy,
judging soul by the dimension of thy perception.
Nascent enough to sense, too early to comprehend, and lame to tell,
what you see is what you get.

Reviews

[Poetry Girl]

wow. this is a really great poem. i never thought of it that way. its like you only see whats shown and thats pretty much it. our eyes and mind just cant handle the trueness (is that spelled right?) of it. wonderful wonderful job :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

a haunting piece of work, loved it

[Coyote Poetry]

I been to places where spirit still haunt. I stood in concentration camps where my body was on edge. The smell of death was there and a lot of spirits have not found peace. I went to the old Mayas Indians did their bad deeds. The earth was of pure evil. We were told do not take anything away with us. I like this poem. The phantasm and our imagination can create great fear. I like the ending. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Ruth]

Awesome work :) I love this poem!
Goodness knows what the shadow has to contend with!
Thought provoking and awesome!
xx

[Dinesh Sairam]

"that circumnavigate the soul and shadow in confusion"

I didn't know the word 'circumnavigate' until now.. Thanks :) This is the best lines of the poem.

"Poor shadow,
owned by soul hidden,
sneaking against noctilucent light."

Once again, 'Noctilucent' - a brilliant word usage.

I just thought you could have done something about the deviations in the syllable count.. Free verse is OK. But too much of deviation hinders the flow. See to that.

A overall nice poem.. Kudos.

Keep writing.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

love the metaphysical lure of mystery inlaid in the poetic~ while the last line grounds it back into corporeal reality~ well done shifting through the use of language semi classic yet quite relevant~ engaging and well done write~

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"The world is oppugnancy, deceived by its
ability to perceive light that flickers, a consciousness."

{i like the dark resigned-submitting mood--great piece of poetry!!!}

"Poor shadow,
owned by soul hidden,
sneaking against noctilucent light."

james;-)

[heich]

beautifully written..need not say more.

[TeenRomance2]

Very beautifully written.