Melted Snow
A Book by Atta
 Mana and Nettie are "immortal" beings and have been together for centuries. So when Nettie loses her memories Mana must convince her of who he is or suffer eternity alone.  © 2013 Atta
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Please ignore poor spelling and grammar if you can, some pointers are very helpful such as "I would have worded this differently", or "I think you meant this". Please be polite, but know I am open to advice.
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I would love to hear more description about their uniforms and school. Also, there were some words missing, but I could fill them in. The prologue seems a little telling no mystery behind it. When it came to the poison Lucious had it could have been more gradual or have Nettie realize her own weakness when seeing the vial, "Where did you get that?" " Ha! you recognize it? You won't remember anything in your next life once you take this!" kind of thing instead of Lucious explain it all.
I really love the storyline, and creativity of the character names except Ichigo (Strawberry? I love it though) Keep writing I am subscribing to your book.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
Heh, yeah, when I get into my writing I tend to forget words. I'll remember to read through my work .. read moreHeh, yeah, when I get into my writing I tend to forget words. I'll remember to read through my work a bit more before posting it to make sure I catch all my mistakes.
And now that you mention it, the prologue does have the cliche villian explaining everything beforehand... I'll probably look back into that and see if I can't make it sound a bit better.
As for Ichigo, it was the name of the character in the manga Reagan was reading--I was hoping someone might realize it was the manga Bleach.
Your review is really helpful, please continue to point out any mistakes you see in the chapters I intend to post in the future and have a great day :D
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11 Years Ago
Ha, I knew it was from an Anime, and I never read or watch Bleach. I missed that bandwagon its over .. read moreHa, I knew it was from an Anime, and I never read or watch Bleach. I missed that bandwagon its over 200 something episodes...I don't have the time to marathon it ^_^
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I would love to hear more description about their uniforms and school. Also, there were some words missing, but I could fill them in. The prologue seems a little telling no mystery behind it. When it came to the poison Lucious had it could have been more gradual or have Nettie realize her own weakness when seeing the vial, "Where did you get that?" " Ha! you recognize it? You won't remember anything in your next life once you take this!" kind of thing instead of Lucious explain it all.
I really love the storyline, and creativity of the character names except Ichigo (Strawberry? I love it though) Keep writing I am subscribing to your book.
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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11 Years Ago
Heh, yeah, when I get into my writing I tend to forget words. I'll remember to read through my work .. read moreHeh, yeah, when I get into my writing I tend to forget words. I'll remember to read through my work a bit more before posting it to make sure I catch all my mistakes.
And now that you mention it, the prologue does have the cliche villian explaining everything beforehand... I'll probably look back into that and see if I can't make it sound a bit better.
As for Ichigo, it was the name of the character in the manga Reagan was reading--I was hoping someone might realize it was the manga Bleach.
Your review is really helpful, please continue to point out any mistakes you see in the chapters I intend to post in the future and have a great day :D
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11 Years Ago
Ha, I knew it was from an Anime, and I never read or watch Bleach. I missed that bandwagon its over .. read moreHa, I knew it was from an Anime, and I never read or watch Bleach. I missed that bandwagon its over 200 something episodes...I don't have the time to marathon it ^_^
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