A Malicious Perfection

From wherein the angel's heart does malice brew so cold?

Asperity awaits; looming beneath an elated demeanor

While my fingers danced atop a cherub's breast,

Undone by the footprints of those who wandered before me.

I need not you to speak of the past,

'Tis all written on your stomach.

Yet, is that not what you are?

Trampled petals, stomped by carelessness;

Quenching for thirst,

Yearning for the sun from under

The shadows of strangers,

Expecting a piece of you?

Why is it I chose you?

Amid the flourishing gardens of heaven,

O, you chose to lay on the brink of a canyon.

And I still caught your eyes.

Miles away,

Yet you enchanted me by a moment's sway,

And I wrestled death for you.

I ordered you be nurtured by the servants,

Humming lullabies that substituted love,

Watching your every branch bear fruit

As my mouth drools;

Without a taste but of a glance

towards your luscious cherries,

I knew you would be perfect.

Author's Note

Photo courtesy of Nonnetta of Deviant Art.

Reviews

[VelvetRosetta]

As the seperant who enticed Eve, or so it seems to have that twisted indulgence, the oh so wrong yet, oh so good feel, tempting.I love so many lines but the begging and end are my favorite, brought the piece together.
Wonderfully penned!

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, thanks muchly, Velvet.

[Bluefire]

"From wherein the angel's heart does malice brew so cold?"
I agree with Writer.
It is very thought provoking and plays on the chords of things both beautiful and broken.
Well done. ^^

[Tai Ryens]

You flatter me, Blue, like always. Thanks muchly.

[Bluefire]

You're welcome! ^^

[Writer #00]

WC won't let me post all of my review... : (. This was VERY thought-provoking and well-written. The imagery was great and contributed well to the tale. Thanks for sharing this with us!!

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you, I'm flattered.

[Rhea752]

Great imagery and vocabulary. This is once again amazing Tai. Keep it up :)

[Cassie]

Nice choice of words. I like

[Baby Ricochet]

This is classic forlorn Tai. No violent metaphors but it's still you. The painting looks like the artist Miro. Great work Tai. You still got it. So do I and I need shots for it.

[Tai Ryens]

Thank you, Baby R.

[Frieda P]

This one takes a few reads, love the imagery here, and the first line is killer. I was thinking it's that forbidden fruit that entices, but so worth it in the end..of course if i read it a few more times, which I plan to, I"m sure I'll wrap my head around it a from a different view. An intriguing write Tai, much enjoyed this one.

[Tai Ryens]

Ah, always a joy to hear your thoughts. Thank you.

[Pax]

as i was re-reading this two many times ~ i find the imagery mindblowing ~ now i quite regret having scratching the surface or just rambled some random thoughts last time ~ now i see clearly ~ the past marks us right ~ in every part of the body you'll see the marks ~ some faded but its still there but that doesn't meant we are not allowed to love and having a second chance right ~ those two deserved something more ~ great Tia my friend!

[Tai Ryens]

Not expected, but an intriguing thought nonetheless. Thanks. Hope you enjoyed.

[Pax]

i always do Tai ~ you and Haunt, when it comes to poetry like this... you two are my fav...

[Tai Ryens]

I am flattered.~