My words

I wish everyone cared

And believed in my vision

I wish my friends for just once

Would stop to listen

 

I wish that for just once

My words would matter

I wish my words could hold you together

And not let you shatter

 

I wish my words would have a meaning

That my words could be

Something so wonderfull

A reason for you to fall in love with me

Reviews

[Hyacinth]

This is just...beautiful. its remarkable how you can convey so much in so little.

[Another brick in the wall]

Thank you!

[Justin]

You can really tell the emotion like the person below me said. I'm sorry I'm horrible at giving reviews, but I really liked this piece.

[Another brick in the wall]

Thank you for letting me know you liked it!

[Stephanie K.]

Another great piece, I could really feel the emotion. "I wish that for once" (ln 5) I would personally change this to something along the lines of "I wish that for a day" etcetera, because you used once in a line previous and if it's used too often it starts to lose its depth.

[Another brick in the wall]

I know, and i thought about doing it, but since the poem is so short, i felt like having it this way. Thanks for the tip anyway!