Nocturnal Lust

I wrote this for someone who loves me only after midnight. I'm sure many of you can relate.

You are no mystery

You only think of me when the moon and stars illuminate your empty bed

But for some reason I'm okay with that

Because it means you're lonely for something only I can give you

Author's Note

please critique

Reviews

[Arsh]

"You are no mystery,
but a leaf of misery
Your love brings me joy,
though you make memory

You come to my bed
When the moon glared at the sky,
but i'm damn okay with that
cause, I understand - the worth of mid - night."

You must tryna writing poetry in stanzas. It makes an impact on reader's mind & he becomes addicted to walk around your pages ov'r n' ov'r again.

Ps. Your feelings're full of emotions. Every-body wants love in the world, but hardly.. few seemed able to find true - love which is not just meant to be loved only on nights, but on the sun as well for life. Keep writing!

[LannyB]

Beautiful arsh! Thanks for sharing, I see the difference between the two. I like your version much better, I will take your advice!

[Relic's Bare Trees]

The moon affects the ocean tides and I'm sure it affects the lustful feelings of those who are searching for an erotic night. Familiar partners are the easiest route to get there sometimes. I've known guys like that and any partner will do at times. No critiques here. Finely written. Welcome to WC. :)