Please Say

Please Say

A Poem by Apple Green Sprite

Please say we're okay,
I only wait for a phrase
to define what we are,
to begin our new days.

We know that we are different
Than the ones who came before.
But why can't we risk it?
And end up being more?

© 2015 Apple Green Sprite


Author's Note

Apple Green Sprite
I'm sorry for sharing such pitiful poem because I can't scribble good thoughts lately. I'm not confident about this, though. Criticisms are not an ultimatum. Enjoy! :)

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always risk it! and never settle for being 'okay'!

Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I think this is a lovely brief write filled with yearning Leann.

I don't think theres a need for the two question marks at the end - perhaps just after '...more?' since you've joined the last two lines with 'And '.

No... this is good. :)


Posted 8 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this one!
Keep it up!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


This was really good, it flows beautifully and i like the last line "end up being more?"
Love it! :)

Posted 8 Years Ago


WELL DONE!Short sweet and raw emotions!
I really enjoyed this piece of poetry,
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Apple Green Sprite

8 Years Ago

Thank you very much Jamestown! Glad you liked it. :)
I enjoyed the way you worded this write with your thoughts , it flowed so nicely!!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Apple Green Sprite

8 Years Ago

I enjoyed reading your review as well. Thanks to that, andrew! :)
Short yet potent. Nicely done Miss. You sure have your way with words. Please know that this poem is not pitiful at all. Keep them coming! :-)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Apple Green Sprite

8 Years Ago

your words are encouraging. Thank you Lavender Soya! :)

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Apple Green Sprite
Apple Green Sprite

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